Her loneliness
fell through the holes,
as she searched for
just a breath of warmth.
Pennies from heaven
were scarce these days.
Everyone knew her too well,
begging on the same corner,
to feed her habit.
Author notes
Prompt - empty pockets (30-40 words)
In a list
A contest entry
- 30-40 words of Brilliance #20 by Aussie Gypsy.
550 points, ended November 1, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh wow the first poem I read for this contest and I am in love. Just the kind of thing I was hoping for, so perfectly written. Best to you in the contest
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a druggie,,very well portrayed,,oh the sadness
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WoW... I loved this poem a lot for its beautiful sentiments..
I wish you good luck in the contest
Love
Kiddy -
WOW! This is wonderful...what a creative take on the prompt...you always write with such depth and insight...a pleasure and inspiration to read...
best,
mystic
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Great job of the prompt here, quite a poignant reminder of what is on the street everyday. Good luck.
C
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Poet
That habit. How very hard to break they say. And pennies from heavy can never lighten that load until their last overdose. Such reality in your poem and so sad.
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