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the Masquerade

                          They hide behind their masks,
                          and dance the dance of deciet.
                          For everyday is an attempt,
                          to fool all thay chance to meet.

                        There is no loyalty present ever,
                        to anyone thay might know.
                        All the worlds a giant stage,
                        each day a  brand new show.

                      They can't be true or reveal
                        the face behind the mask.
                      To see that their only human,
                    would distract them from the task.

                  On they dance into the night,
                  until the music come to an end.
                Lights out and the doors closed,
                  no more partners, no more friends.

              Alone they stand no place to go,
              no roads to cross, allbridges burned.
              Can they recover,change their ways,
              how many lesson have they learned?
         

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  • Coffer
    November 2, 2008

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    This peice is definetly interesting with an eerie slyness to the construction. Some spelling and grammer errors, but a good project.


    • soulchaser26
      December 9, 2008
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      soulchaser26

      Thank you for you comments you have no idea what they mean to me.Yes I made a few errors I get carried away sometimes when I'm writing and forget to check once I'm done. I used to know alot of people that gave me the inspiration I needed for that particular poem. Again THANK YOU!