thick brown sweater over
rough khaki overalls
gray wool muffler
wrapped around head
two missing teeth
where everyone can see
he pokes the fire
cursing the dead
burnt smell of leaves
mixes with fog
his cigarette smokes
crushed and damp
mumbles
this winter is so cold
Author notes
oldtinroof
A contest entry
- 50 words: Winter by whiterabbit..
500 points, ended November 27, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great imagery and thoughts.
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i enjoyed this, perfect imagery, i can almost smell the burnt leaves. describes a cold winter perfectly
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mmm. yes. i did enjoy the smells in this
-joan.
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Wonderful imagery in this! No 'extra' words (like I do!) and the brevity of the write m,akes it all the more powerful!
All the best with this
Gaylene
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thank you
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