The words fall to the page
In crystal sounds
From within my mind
My hummer, pain
My lust my rage
The reader sits
Spell bound
In thought
As they read
Imagination caught
The two of us lost in word
My writing
My message heard
To all of those you walk this way
Love a poet this I pray
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This piece has merit. As a reader, from a writers point of view, it needs to be expanded word wise thus adding a greater dimension to the poem. Anything I sugget would not be fitting it must come from you. If you rewrite it send me a message and I'll return for another read. Good luck and happy trails
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Good work!
My humor, pain
To all of those who walk this way
That is just my suggestion for line four, and next to the last line.
Damon
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In the first line, I feel that you could replace "fall" with another word...something less generic, with more emotion in it? Just a suggestion, I don't have examples. I like the idea of the poem, although the flow seems stilted and awkward at times.
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Very thoughtful... You are so right in giving the characteristics of a writer/poet/dramatist/essayist... it suits all kind of writers...
Pain, hummer/rage - all such words can be summarized in one single word experience... I am sure you have experienced all such emotions/situations and that is why you are very successful in saying who a writer is...
good job
keep writing
Love
Kiddy
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