I'm sick of lies to make you happy.
Already this poem is sounding so sappy.
I act glad like life is exciting.
The real truth though is in what I'm writing.
Do you want to carry on
Reading this it could take long?
Here it goes, deep breathe in.
Last chance to chuck this in the bin.
So much of life has been a lie.
Welcoming in and saying goodbye.
Opening doors and closing them tight.
Is there no normal still left in sight?
Love and junk, who needs it?
I'm not even sure in this life if I fit.
Friends backstab, cheat and steal.
Makes you wonder, which ones are real?
Siblings, which ones are real, step and half?
This story is making me want to barf.
Sometimes school goes awfully wrong.
It's too boring and far too long.
When will we next see the sun?
When will I next be happy and fun?
Tomorrow is stormy just like today.
I can't wait till life is okay.
This world is a tortured place.
But nowadays it’s what I have to face.
Sometimes in life, I can't see why.
I can’t be bothered and just want to die.
But today I wrote what's on my mind.
Now to my heart this poem I’ll bind.
A contest entry
- SAD Poetry--- Let Me Have Your Best by Ativan.
900 points, ended November 2, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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You were more interested in rhyming than substance and it shows. Substance should always come first. Rhyming is not everything. I did enjoy reading it because the flow was interesting but once again, the substance was not taken into consideration. Some lines, however, hit me hard because they were very powerful. I just wish the whole poem was like those few lines.
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I understand what you're saying, I've only written rhyming poetry so far. I tried, non-rhyming poetry before and it didn't work for me. I think I'll give it another go. You have inspired me =) *cheesy grin*
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