Where I used the words, “my lover”
You suggested that perhaps “companion”
Would be a better choice.
Oh, you child!
Just because I am old and fat
Does not mean I have forgotten.
I could still run my fingers
Behind your neck,
Play the vertebrae just below
Your hairline, sharp keys on a piano.
I could touch my tongue
To the hot hollow of your throat,
Lick a line down your breastbone
And flick your nipples until they
Hums into hardness.
You could fall into the soft sea
Of my breasts;
My arms could lift you over the
Gasping waves
Of your ribs.
My large thighs could pull
You down, toward my red
Volcanic center, the soles of my small feet
Slide down your calves,
And up.
I could still leave scratches
On your back you would not feel
Until later.
Author notes
I was quite angry as I started wrting, but ended up just shaking my head at the assumptions young people sometimes have about us oldies!
A contest entry
- Fresh Emotion by Coffer.
800 points, ended November 3, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Ohhh, wow. I remember on one of my poems that some...child...was incredulous at the idea of having sex after the age of 40. How little they know, how much they wrongly assume. Good for you, for such a wise and wonderful retort, Lita. 
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WOW AWESOME...You tell em !!. The older you get the better you know how. Excellent
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I could still run my fingers
Behind your neck,
Play the vertebrae just below
Your hairline, sharp keys on a piano.
I could touch my tongue
To the hot hollow of your throat,
Lick a line down your breastbone
And flick your nipples until they
Hums into hardness.
amazing! very very sexy
oh yeah show them what you've got
sorry if I have to copy paste all that
I love that part a lot
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Thanks for your kind words -- I appreciate you stopping by to read!
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It gave me a Huge smile, "and flick your nipples until they hum into hardness. Oh what a sexy lady, who never says never, and all with a breath of youth.
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this made me smile, sometimes the younger generation forgets that we have lived longer, experienced more, and like a glass of wine, we become better with age congrats on the hm blessings always ~Trisha~
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Oh no need to be angry this is a really sweet poem you have here. Sometimes us younger people can be naive and stupid. Most of them dont ever want to learn anything and dont want to hear it either. I think its stupid because your never to young or to old to learn.
Oh, you child!
Just because I am old and fat
Does not mean I have forgotten.
Haha such refreshing humor you have, dont ever lose it to stupid people and dont let that bother you. Besides i am pretty sure you have experienced things in your life that most young people havent. Its just that they have never been there before because of todays society likes to masks certain things. And so many parents dont give a crap nowindays.
Anyways good luck in the contest, refreshing write.
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WONDERFUL
I love your sense of rebellion, to not be put out in the cold. You know what you want, and you take it. This is a great vent of emotion that leaves an impression on the reader. This is a great peice of work, please just keep doing what you do, and don't let anyone tell you otherwise.
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Thanks for your supportive words; I'll keep them in mind at the next workshop I attend!
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All I can say is "You go, girl." For one thing, 62 is not old, it's the new 42. Anyway, what do dumb young people know about anything -- most of them can not read, let alone write and just see what they say when you ask them to diagram their sentences. LOL.
I love this poem, I love the idea of it, I love the fact that it runs contrary to what seems to be the politically correct opinion of the day.
Excellent.
Garrison
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Umm... to your comment on this poem by Hawkeslake, I find that offensive because I am 21 and yet i am a major bookworm and love books. So yeah. And by the way sometimes people can be like 40 and still act as if they are 20 and still a little frat boy you know... really all depends on how they were raised.
Unfortunanly you have mostly the education system and the parents to blame themselves today cos nobody really seems to care enough.... our education system isnt the best you know.
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Well, You certainly make a good point -- age isn't the major criteria for either wisdom or jerkdom. I guess I was just a little pissed off because my poem was definite being judged by my age and/or appearance... and when it is about one's sexuality, WELL! I got huffy indeed... I'm better now (as well as older LOL)
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Thanks for the kind remarks, Garrison. Does anyone diagram sentences anymore? I actually used to think it was fun, like solving a puzzle -- does that make me a total dork, or just an English junkie? At any rate, I appreciate your stopping by, and giving this "new 42" a boost today!
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I found myself chuckling a little as I read this. Very good.
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A chuckle is always a good antidote to anger! Thanks for reading.
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Many a good tune played on an old fiddle "h". I wonder do they think the act of love is reserved only for the young....How on earth do they think they came to be where they're at now LOL.Oldies I think have the edge on them...A ripened fruit leaves a far more sweeter taste .. Smile my friend...Their turn will come.....mal..
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Yes, it is always good to remember that getting old is inevitable for young lovers! Thanks for your kind words, Mal.
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I absolutely love this and totally agree with your authors notes. Why do they assume because you have reached a 'certain age' you are deemed to be 'past it'?
If only they knew just how much experience counts for, I think we could teach them a thing or two.
Although this was started in anger, it certainly made for entertaining reading. Thank you
All the best in the contest
Sue
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Now if I could just figure out how to do what you do so well -- use a form to express my feelings! I can do doggeral (sp?) and little sentimental pieces, but the deeper things are more difficult... I guess I will just have to keep working. Thanks, Sue, for your support and for stopping by.
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