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Help Unwanted

I want to walk alone.
I want to feel the pain.
I want to sit in the darkness and silently suffer.

I dont want help.
I dont need help.

I can do it on my own.
I can handle it myself.
I can suffer in solitude.

You cause my pain.

Everything would be fine...
if I was left alone.
The attention drives me to insanity.

Finally i'm feeling something,
Now your on a quest to destroy it?

Leave me alone
Ignore me.
Treat me like i dont exist.

Then i'll be just fine.

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Shatter My Soul, Let My Heart Ache

A contest entry

Does all my poetry tend to sound the same? Is this one too straight foward?

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  • Reaper-117
    May 7

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    This poem feel less dark and more like someone trying desperately to find someplace to hide. I don't mean that as a bad thing at all. The need for solitude and serenity is one we all experience, and your poem was a quaint way of looking at that need.
    Thanks for entering.


  • emoempess
    April 19
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    wow

    this is so dark..!!!i feel the pain and sadness in this poem...i really understand it


  • in the dark blue
    April 10
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    This is a nice write..but the flow was kind of off.
    Thanks for your time and entry.


  • Jeb
    April 5

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    Thanks for entering in my contest! This poem is pretty different from most of what I've read. I'm sorry to say this, but you didn't make the finals this time. Better luck to you next time!


  • poeticcaresses
    February 18

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    This feels to me like a suicidal person hiding away. Seeking to run from the help that is offered. Very sad but alluring. Nice write. Thank you for entering and good luck!


  • Ryno
    November 16, 2008
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    not feeling it,
    super strong emotions but cliche
    ~prewrites, come and get them


  • HpWICKEDangel
    November 14, 2008

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    to just be left alone is one thing. we all need our times to be alone. for our minds to settle. but there are times where we need to know that people enjoy what we have created. to know that people do care.so don't be mad or discouraged when some one comes to call. it is just a friendly how do you do? and that we do care.


  • Scyphon
    November 11, 2008

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    Wow, thats a great view. Wonderful poem. Yes it does seem at times, many times, that the wotrld is out to get us, especially when we are finally happy.


  • vampireblood
    November 11, 2008

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    I liked this. I understand that feeling of thinking you can do it on your own or the feeling of wanting to be alone.

    I think the previous comment before me was unnecessary. They dont know for a fact that this poem was about you. Dont let them bother you.

    Cause I think this is good, theres emotion behind it. thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.

    Vampy

  • Nickname
    October 29, 2008
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    No offense; if you don't want attention don't show the poem to anyone.


    • Horrific Hollis
      October 29, 2008
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      It's not about me. It's just a feeling a created in my mind then put into words.


  • Finley
    October 28, 2008
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    WOW

    I love this poem it's very deep and it's a good insight how you feel

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