I couldn't look up,
I couldn't break free,
There was no happiness,
Inside of me.
I took many pills,
Not a tear in my eye,
I repeated the words,
"I want to die."
I was losing grip,
Slipping away,
Finally calm inside,
No more darkened days.
I woke up cold,
So dizzy and numb,
I couldn't believe,
I did what I had done.
Still no second thoughts,
I wanted to die,
Why didn't I know,
I was living a lie.
I was supposed to be free,
And shine like the sun,
Shine brighter on my own,
So I had to run.
Getaway from myself,
And start a new me,
I'm proud of who I am,
Look at me, be ME!
I changed for the better,
And see truth in my life,
I'm going to have a child,
And be an amazing mans wife.
How could this get better,
It's purely tears of joy,
This is my fairy tail,
That I almost destroyed!
Author notes
Inspirational to anyone at the point they just want to give up....
I`m not one in a million... I`m just like you.
I believe that to know you are happy you have to at first be sad.
A contest entry
- My Life is Brilliant by hellizacomin.
400 points, ended November 11, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I liked this write alot. It has been the most different one I have read so far. You started out sad and ended on a happy note. I haven't read any others that have did this so far. Thank you for entering and much luck to you!
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LOL... great lines here, although rhyming 'me' with 'me' in the 7th verse might be improved on a bit(!) The poem I just featured entitled "Rose Colored Sea Shades" is an expansion of sorts on the "pills" aspect of this write. My motivation wasn't suicide, and although I was abusing a variety of things, I don't really carry a lot of regrets from those days. I was just about to wish you well in the contest, but I see you didn't put it one! I've seen lesser writes win points so it's an option you might consider.
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