I know not why I love you
but your very presence entwines with mine.
I love you so completely,
without want or pride.
I know no other way to love you,
self seems not to exist.
So precious is this love of mine,
there's no separateness...
Author notes
Exerpt from Pablo Neruda's Sonnet XVII
"I love you without knowing how, or when, or from where.
I love you straightforwardly, without complexities or pride;
so I love you because I know no other way
than this: where I does not exist, nor you,
so close that your hand on my chest is my hand,
so close that your eyes close as I fall asleep."
promt # 1
Lines~13 Words~46
written for na hetane...
A contest entry
- For the love of my favorites! xo [BIG points] by Poetic Tasha.
2000 points, ended November 6, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Another wonderful poem, wonderful flow of words, and your detail work is pretty awsome to. It was a pleasure to read.
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A moving poem, showing a selfless love.
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Very short and powerful...but i felt as if 'separatness' is a little...eh, I don't know...it doesn't sound well with the poem. My opinion, just a thought. Everyone seams to have liked it though.
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This is so beautiful, I know this kind of love myself, it is a beautiful thing and you have done so much more justice to it. Best to you dear Bandit.
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AutumnGypsy
thank you kindly for the sweet words of praise, im touched you have enjoyed
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lovely ending,,,to slumber together is great A ,LOVED IT
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Peter.O
thank you Peter kindly for the sweet comment and pleased you loved it
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My sister you have tuched my heart once again. The love for your Hetane I understand, you love much and deep it is easy to see. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
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freespirit51
thank you my sister...you know me, i give my all are nothing he is just so easy to love
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Wow, have I missed something here? such deep affection makes me wonder, about love for there is no rhyme or reasion why we love, it, JUST HAPPENS. one of those things they say love is blind, or we are wearing blinders and love has sneaked upon us, and now we stand, mouth gaped opened, wondering how or when this happened. I can only respond: real true love can be a beautiful sweet thing, that saps all the energy and light, you go about each day, not so much thinking, but feeling. Well done. I need to take more lessons about love.
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Confusedboy
thank you kindly for enjoying my words...it was interesting to take those beautiful words and turn them in to mine...love is the most wonderful feeling on earth...thank you again
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HOODWINKED!!!
very nice poem about love, and inspired by a fabulous prompt. a delight to read. i enjoyed this very much. thank you for sharing your amazing talent. keep writing! God bless you always
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Simple but loving. Keep up the good work!
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Hood Winked!
THis is a beautifully emotive poem, describes the true nature of pure love. Just beautiful!
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Hood Winked!
Aww this is so wonderful, it is so loving and I do so love the quote you wrote this on, whoever holds your heart is clearly so very lucky!
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Hood-Wink!
Wow. That was such an amazing write. You did a beautiful job with the soft emotion, truly fitting of the Author notes, too.
Write on.
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Hood Wink!
This is so beautiful; it is short but it gracefully flows off the page in such a soft tone I just smile and feel as though I've heard a love story 100 pages long
Best of Luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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You have been HOOD WINKED by The Poetic Bandits. Hope you enjoy your special day in the spotlight. Lovely verse you have penned here; sentiments well expressed in these lines.
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HOODWINK
Truly beautiful.
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HOODWINKED
Very nice poem about love, and inspired by a fabulous prompt. A delight to read, good luck in the contest!
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Hood-Wink
Beautiful short love poem. Well worded. Overflowing with emotion and felling. Great job!
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Hood-Wink!
Mom,
Even at 75 MPH, I am stopping by to extend a hearty Hood-Wink! Your offering speaks well of the relationship shared through spirit. Excellent Job!
Your Continual Generosity, Leadership, and Strength of Personality make you deserving of this honor and many more. Would that I could when the body gets tired and the spirit struggles, many heartfelt hugs I would give you. Rejoice, knowing that soon we shall look upon another again.
Love Always,
Your Son,
Silent Hawk
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Hood-Wink!
This is lovely. Excellent work with the prompt. Neruda was a genius! All the best in the Contest! Beautiful flow, rhyme, word choice. Wouldn't change a thing.
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Hood-Wink!
I think that this is a beautiful poem you did a lovely job good luck you in the contest best wishes always be well
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Hood-Wink!
Dear sister this is so beautiful and straight from the heart! Your poem touched me deeply, I too have found my one true love. Thanks for sharing. I love you so much. your sis Winter Moon
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When strong love meshes ,
so do the souls.
Two becomes one.
The simple message of love is still so strong ,
mountains can be moved.
I love the way you state the lack of knowledge for your euphoria.
So sweet and beautiful.
Nothing can tear you apart
when ya keep living straight from the heart.
Outstandingly beautiful,
ten bears
[Lowell]
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Lowell Poe
my brother Ten Bear straight from the heart is the love of all loves and as the soul clings, a soul mate is born...thank you so much for your always carry about meyou are the Brother of all brothers
otc...
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Aww, this is really beautiful. it's short but have a lot of emotion here! you two are such a beautiful couple, by showing your love you make people happy. not only for you two but for showing such love like yours exist.. bravo!
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Angelflower
to love and to be loved is life's greatest gift and to share the joy, peace and contentment is life's treasure to others...your sweet comment lays softly upon my heart and from us both I Thank You
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Beautifully written and expressed! A pure pleasure to read! Best of luck in the contest!
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faderman1959
thank you kindly my friend for beautiful comment, they always mean so much to me
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I Love It
i love this truly simple yet very compelling peice...I think it's simplicity really truly explains how simple love can truly be. there really are no reasons to love someone (their nice...sure, they have money...great, good sex...awesome) sometimes you just love someone because you do and that is expressed very clearly here. Simple yet compelling is how I would describe this. Great job!!!! -
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nookie31976
i am so touched by your kind comment so pleased you have enjoyed my simple words of love so very much...a warm and heart felt thank you
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This is short but gets the point across so well. Great word choices, and I like your choice of spacing. Thanks for sharing this!
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goodnight
Im so pleased you have enjoyed and thank you so much for the smile
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Wow
You have really outdone yourself here, this is such a well written poem, so full of emotion and love, I am sure your na hetane will love it, blessings with love John
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SoulWhispher
niaish sweet John for the kind words and sweet praise, they do mean a lot to me...i do believe he loved it as well
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This is very cute. Simple and not over done. I like the way you took the prompt and personalized it. good job!
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Fixing Tomorrow
thank you very much for the kind words and so very pleased you enjoyed
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love ur poeam and i love some one and i dont even know why i love him so much anmd he says he loves me but i dont think he dose cause were not togrther and yeah keep it up
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bubbles of tears
thank you sweetheart for the kind words
if that boy loves you
you will know it
for everything he does
he will do for you
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One of the few free-verse poems I enjoyed reading.
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Lemure S. Knox
thank you very much and a smile i do feel coming on...im so pleased you have enjoyed
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2 thumbs !
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lory
thank you so much for the 2 thumbs up...it made me smile
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Cute
lol. The endings of the stanzas seemed a little like made-up words, which kind of made the whole poem seem childish (in a good way-playful). It was cute, and I loved the background! It was super pretty. The yellow font was also a very good fit. I didn't think the green matched, but then I noticed that you were probably trying to immitate the glitter. Great job! lol.
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crimsonsorrow
thank you very much and very pleased you found it to our liking
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This is really beautiful
Well done and good luck!
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Emerald-Eyes
thank you kindly and so pleased you found it beautiful
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Ah, soooo very rooomantic, indeed! Most fine and most deftly done poem chock full of emotion and deep feelings! Nicely done... bravo...
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Eusebius
Thank you so kindly and very pleased you found it enjoyable
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i saw the movie about pablo neruda,,i really enjoyed it,,as i do your lovely poem good luckx
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Peter.O
thank you Peter so very much and it was a wonderful movie...im so very pleased you have enjoyed
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yes it was great ann , my pleasure
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Your words flow gently across na hesta, bringing a lift of sincerity not felt anywhere else.
You have shown trueness in every sense and it shows perfectly in each line.
Niaish for sharing na hemeoone
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Silent Cougar
niaish na hetane nemehotatse forever and a day..i am touched you have found my words to your liking
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beautifully stated
thank you for taking the time to enter dear one
best of luck
Tasha
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Poetic Tasha
thank you kindly sweetheart im pleased you enjoyed
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WHERE MINE.
This is beautiful like you my love
I love you so much
you are so lucky
Passions
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PassionsPromise
yours is always right here for you my little love i love you bunches
thank you so much sweetheart
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