A prodigy they called him genius beyond measure
A vast array he hid within his facial gestures
A sparkling underglow hidden beneath his impenetrable hide
He let his one weakness her and only her inside
She made him look like a fool he failed to look
He made that one mistake thats all it took
Trip stumble and fall
Crossed the pain he felt it all
Upon impact at the speed of light
Shattering into a million billion splintered splinters
His infinite patients eating him alive
Violently recklessly piecing together himself un-abide
She was the grace that kept his mind in orbit
She punched him down before he
Falling from his knees
Hit the cold still concrete
Gave a swift flawless kick to his teeth
She swung an open fist
Guess what was next on the list
She sliced him open good
Made him silent where he stood
She left him laying there empty and cold
His love leaving only his love enduring soul
A contest entry
- Fresh Emotion by Coffer.
800 points, ended November 3, 2008, 19 entries
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This tells a great story about some hardships that most of us endure throughout our life. We must all know when to pull ourselves together and move on though, I have experience heartbreak that lead to a heavier addiction and more problems at home. Good job on the prompt of letting your emotions flow free, but it could use a bit of working out. good luck during judging.
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Thanks for the comment
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patients is spelt wrong babe. i love it well done
boom chicky chicky chiky boom chicky chicky chicky gimme that gimme that gimme that banana...im sorry wiggles hot potato song just poped into my head hey did you know if you slow the song right down and give it a deep husky voice it shounds so dirty lol
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I cant find a different spelling for patients
Lol it does sound a lil dirty huh?
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Never heard heartache be likend to murder before. It is an entirely to fitting analogy.
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