O ngoing fixation with opiates,
V isibly increasing each day.
E rasing yourself more each time.
R efusing recovery,
D evouring all that you have.
O verreaching your limits,
S ilently, your final breath
E scapes your lungs.
D id you know that we'd miss you?
Author notes
Acrostic form.
A contest entry
- Addiction by poetryality.
900 points, ended November 14, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very well done. It packs a punch but in an understanding way.
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Poignant!
This is outstanding. Acrostics are among my fav form & you managed this brilliantly! 
Trust this'll do well in the Contest. I love the way you end this with the question:
D id you know that we'd miss you?
This is the question that addicts never ask themselves! How do my actions affect others? Will my death impact others?
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wow... i have a friend on here whos son overdosed at 24 it was a lil over a year ago now but her whole world has just been shattered by it... dont know whether to send her a link to this one or not, a great write,
hugs,
georgie,
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Awesome
I, myself, have had and still battle with addiction. Not to opiates, though! But it still hits home to read. I love it!
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Drug addiction is a slow death. It removes the spirit and denies the soul. The reality of addiction being as much a spiritual sickness as it is a physical ailment that screams out in your words here poet.
This acrostic reaches deep into the soul and release a "last breath" that makes the reader think, and rethink using.
EXCELLENT!
I would have appreciated the acrostic more had there not been a space between the first letter and the rest of the word. The wonder of ‘acrostic poetry’ is not being able to detect the form.
"Ongoing fixation with opiates,
Visibly increasing each day.
Erasing yourself more each time.
Refusing recovery,
Devouring all that you have.
Overreaching your limits,
Silently, your final breath
Escapes your lungs.
Did you know that we'd miss you?"
Acrostic poetry is one of my favorite forms. I would have gotten it in the end without the author's notes. Anyway-- Yes!
POWERFUL!
Thank you for this entry and I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Powerful
Sadness, that's what I feel when reading this. I knew someone who went missing a year and a half ago and they may have overdosed on depression..tear
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I can actually say that the use of any drugs is an unconcious attempt of taking your life. This poem really has taken me back to those days when nothing mattered but increasing my being able to use and denial... Thanks for sharing it with me and good luck in the contest...
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I can relate to that ! have tried to take my life before. You did excellent here.
Well done on a wonderful poem
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A wonderfully done accrostic poem.. It hits on all the main points of addiction. The final question will always remain unanswered.. And I guess, for an addict, it wouldn't matter.
Good luck in the contest.
Den
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OMG
This is really great...Man that is the total truth that is for sure. My son died from opiates because of addiction. It was so sad for he had been sober 3 months and used in one day and died that night. This accrostic is just brilliant on addiction. Like you said he overreached his limits and so does anyone else whom suffer from addiciton and you just never know if you'll die when you abuse drugs and alcohol or both at the same time. My son just died from pain meds that was his choice of drugs, opiates because of so many motocross accidents. Best wishes hun in the contest.
Wishing you many blessings,
Much Love,
Kelle Marie
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so much pain in this, makes it hard to read...i thought the line about erasing yourself was very powerful.
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This is really sad but so many people struggle with the thoughts of ending their life there is no easy answer to this problem thanks for sharing good luck to you in the contest be well
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he knows silently watching for the first time he is at peace no more anger pain frustation of life no more trying to keep up the pretence of being happy no more worrying the most important person in his life yes its safe to say cindy yes he knew that you
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