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Numb

Emotionless
Painless

Numb

 

Living in a constant state of emptiness

Letting nothing in as a result of nothing to let escape

 

Emotionless
Painless

Numb

 

 

Completely void of all meaning

No desire to change for the better

 

Emotionless
Painless

Numb

 

Mind blank, no self concern

Self mutilation no longer neccessary

 

Emotionless
Painless

Numb

 

No longer feeling pain or joy

No use for this pittiless body

 

Emotionless
Painless

Numb

 

Wandering aimlessly with no destination

Sitting helplessly not seeking help

 

Emotionless
Painless

Numb

 

Nothing to seek in her eyes

No single thread of hope left to grasp

 

Emotionless
Painless

Numb

 

Let her go, you can't save her

Give up on her, she's completly

 

Emotionless
Painless

Numb

 

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  • peregrin
    February 2

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    I like the write, the concept, all of it. Have a few comments though.
    The repeating phrase, it gets a little old by the end of the write. I would maybe put another two lines in between each set of "Emotionless, Painless, Numb" but that is just a suggestion.
    Very nice concept, I am feeling it.
    Please follow the rules I have placed for my contest, or you will be DQ'ed.

    Thank you for your entry,

    Gwen

  • sensual
    January 30

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    Oh my

    I can see this person looking at another person wondering how they can be so emotionless, painless, and numb, trying to reach out to them and help them but falls short every time, so eventually they give up. Excellent work.


  • adsaige
    November 19, 2008
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    I like the repetition, it works well for this piece, which is good, otherwise I'd be ripping my hair out by now. Irregardless, this poem is a good write, very well written - and I could relate very well. There isn't a particular piece I could pick out without the piece not being as strong, as each line was significant in its placement and meaning. Fantastic, really!