Home opposition marks
incidental crying,
inciting devilish exploits.
Having open minds
invaded chemically
ionizes disciples’ electrons.
Horrified officers march
in, corralling
indecent demonic embellishers
Hell opens masterfully,
inviting cynical
investors demanding evacuation.
However, opium makes
individuals compose
inept decisions erratically.
Author notes
moluv10
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A contest entry
- are you up for it? by willowprincess.
1200 points, ended November 9, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Dark Call Has Sounded. Can you take it? by SheWasPreternatural.
1500 points, ended December 30, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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oh my god! this was masterful! the descriptive imagery! the flow! loved it. "Hell opens masterfully,
inviting cynical
investors demanding evacuation." No wonder it was a gold
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Superb!
This was masterfully done Mo. Congrats on the Gold...I can see how you won it with this thought-provoking write. Loved acrostic-hybrid piece. Very well done; thanks for letting me know about this one. Not only did you accomplish that intricate piece goal, but the unscrolled story kept me involved.
AsIThink...
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WOW.
Congratulations on the shiny, though by the time I'd read the first stanza, it was sort of expected. This contest hostess knows what's good. I couldn't help but hold my breath until the very last punctuation mark.
Extremely clean and concise, not a word out of place.
Yes,
PERFECT.
Always,
jin
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Thank you for your great comments. I will treasure them.
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wow, this was very powerful, and you did a great job of sticking to the form.
i love the stanza:
"Hell opens masterfully,
inviting cynical
investors demanding evacuation."
i think this is your strongest stanza, but overall you have a very cohesive poem. great job. -
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Thank you so much for your comments and awarding me the gold. Thanks for hosting this kind of contest. It was challenging to me. Much love to you.
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you was up for this huh? good
in the show down
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I hope i was..lol thanks for the luck dear.
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Fantastic freeverse!! The power in this is palpable!
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Thank you so much for your continued support. I treasure it. Thanks again.
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Wow
That was goood!
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thanks! so nice to see you stop by. your comment means a lot to me.
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good job following the form. i'll be back to comment on the poem later.
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Thank you for hosting this type of contest. Good luck judging.
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i have always thought of you
as a powerful writer. this poem
confirms it. Wonderfully done,
Maurice.
Love, Lane
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Your wonderful comments warm my heart. Thank you so much.
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OH BOY!!
WOW! Very deep, very intense, very hott write kid!! excellent, lots of luck(that u don't need!
) in the contest!
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thanks bro! I am always grateful for your support homie!
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