Like leaves falling from autumn kissed trees,
the years of my life sift slowly to the ground.
Yesterday I was a child; today, a bent old woman.
As the years are fewer to enjoy I find myself
remembering when I could not wait for time to pass.
Now each moment of breath is precious,
each morning awakening is a gift from God.
They dwindle so quickly that they become a
blur on the face of time, alien to me sometimes.
Oh, to be able to gather them to me once again.
I would spend them like cherished pennies,
relinquishing them only when made to do so.
Time, precious time, how tightly I grasp you,
knowing at last the value of your moments.
Author notes
Option #3
A contest entry
- FOR THE POETIC BANDITS by debilynn.
900 points, ended November 3, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites by Melissa Gayle.
800 points, ended December 10, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This reads a bit like prose to me - but it is well done in that aspect.
You have enough definition of imagery and emotion that truly carries the piece well.
Thank you for your entry -
Bravo!
So delightfully poignant, tender & meaningful! I guess I'm at the age now where I can REALLY relate to this write. I feel as if I could've written this myself, but you penned this so successfully I'm sure I'm only wishing I could've! The mark of a fine write is that it draws the reader in & captures them with the human relating & feeling familiar with the territory as if it were home! You've accomplished that goal dear one & this is truly of that Gold! So happy to have read this!
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awesome
Oh Wolfie, this poem is beautiful.Your words ,soft and tender wrapped around my heart as I read them.Such wisdom you have woven into your write.I could realte to your poem so well, I feel the exact way that you do. It's funny, when we are kids, we can't wait to grow up, can't wait for time to pass.... but then when we have grown up, we wish that we were young again and wish at times that 'time' stood still for us!!!! crazy thinking hey?
you have been a pleasure to read my dear friend, and thank you so much for sharing with us, your thoughts and voice.
Much love and happiness,
~Angel-anne~ (aka Anne)
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Amazing!
This is amazing Mom and so true to life. Yes we need to embrace each moment as if it were the last we never know when our time here on earth will be up. I love you so much. Congrats on the Gold so well deserved. Thanks for sharing your amazing talent with us all. Love and hugs Theresa
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Super !
Well Done Wolfie!
Congrats on the Gold Trophy! 
Bandits Rock!
Brother Dennis
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Congrats on a well deserved Gold. I can really relate to your words, as I'm half way my sixties now (still feel twenty in my head though). Beautiful piece of work.
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I am so very honored to have won gold in this contest. The words came right from my heart and from my experience in growing older. All the poems were great and I thank you for this chance to enter.
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Congratulations on winning the Gold trophy! This poem deserves it! Great piece!
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a great write. speaks volumes of the heart vivid imagery. i like this:
'Oh, to be able to gather them to me once again.
I would spend them like cherished pennies,
relinquishing them only when made to do so.'
thank you for entering and sharing your talent. keep writing! God bless you always
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lovely
this is beautiful...how we take advantage of things sometimes...how we are selfish and ungreatiful. this puts things into perspective. im glad you can appericate the little things and write about it so well.
&hearts
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JUST BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!
I feel just this way! As one becomes older to them time moves ever more swiftly along. I berlieve all of us would likel to relive our life and make the changes we see now we should have made.'s
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This is a deep and pensive write about the preciousness of time. That awareness often comes late when it is dwindling and not in great supply. Thank you for sharing this very thoughtful poem. Best of luck in the contest.
Dennis
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Wistful and gentle, you've captured the true feelings of being alive... how precious each moment is and how, as we look back, we see how much we've squandered... A wonderful poem full of truth and beauty.
Ken
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I differently relate to you in this write. When I look back i see a lot that I should of done and didn't. Now though I try to make each day count even if it's just to write another thought. Best to you in the contest.
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Sis...so after my own heart in your thoughts from your soul! Redeeming the time we have left in our lives while wishing to reclaim what we have lost.
So originally and through splendid imagery you have painted her portrait, her heart and soul, and so many of us can identify with her...My heart is so with you...Valuing each day, moment, and chance to leave an imprint that causes us to be remembered not only now, but later...Love you sis! Great penning...Good luck in the contest!
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Brilliant!!!
Best wishes in the contest!! Peace, Cyn 
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you are a fantastic poet! i really enjoyed reading this
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