Daggers chase petals in harsh moonlight,
sleeping away the shadows to clarify their
vision; whistled leaves falsetto sounds
deceitful behind the promises.
Pull rubber-bands past elastic limitation
and tack jell-o to our unwed fingertips to
finalize the slumber- bound to our black solstice
as Death purifies the air to coax us beyond
common sense...
We broke like china-dolls in glass cases;
shattered in the wake of animosity interlaced
with obscurity- fell down in perfect unison
to catch our breath before the cobblestones crumbled.
Author notes
When someone kills themselves, they kill everyone they knew.
Llamas own
A contest entry
- Anything Goes! by vampireblood.
475 points, ended November 15, 2008, 26 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was really good. I totally agree with you. I use to think that death was the way out, but in reality it just hurts everyone that loves you. I like the font you used for this as well. Nice write. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
Vampy -
Sorry so late.
Today's Poem: 10/28/2008
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I love how you did your font! How did you do that? My system does not alow me to do that.
I definitely loved the poem. You did a fantasti c poem. The last stanza is most beautiful.
*HS*
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Your AN is so true.
And the poem is very well penned. Your word usage and emotions were great.
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wow this is a fantasic poem i love it
this poem is brillient its diffrent but its a fantsic write i love it very powerful indeed keep it up your brillient poet and you truely know it -
wow powerful and raw... amazing! truly dark and realistic... nicely done!
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wow! very well written
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Such truth, you have spoken...it is sad when someone gets to the point of no return and they go over the edge and take their life, and you are right, how it devastates all around, too...
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This piece is stunning! The word usage, the flow, the imagery and message were all simply breath takimg! Excellent write!
Lauren
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This is brilliant and I really enjoyed
every line in it. You did a wonderful
job with this one! Thanks a lot for
sharing it here!
Jeremy0826 -
TOday's Poem: 10/29/2008
Great choice! This was an awesome poem!! Thanks for sharing.
Write on.
~*~Jessi
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