My body is a cavern
a sickly red Aladdin’s cave
no wishes here,
only the steady
tick
tock
of a heart
that’s heading for a stop,
joints that ache to fold around you
ear made for the sound of your voice
I am your halfway house;
rehabilitation and an easy fuck
And the worst part is
I never, ever want it to end.
I can’t even articulate what I fear.
Words wrap themselves, maggoty,
around my tongue, until I’m choked with prose,
apologies rise in my throat
until the bile of unspoken sentances
makes me rasp ineloquent
and excuses grow moss over my teeth.
you love me, you love me not
bounces around my skull
with all the resonance of memory
and burns me;
in this sick carousel of desires
I am afraid of never being loved.
Author notes
I dislike this, but for some reason I don't want to edit or delete it. Ugh.
A contest entry
- snowflakes- I by bird-mad girl.
1800 points, ended November 24, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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hey sweets
long time no talk
i thought this was beautuful, and so graphic
the imagery is great
what do u mean your afraid you won't be loved?
ur an amazing person, anyone who doesn't see that is stupid
we're perfect in all our imperfection -
I can’t even articulate what I fear.
Words wrap themselves, maggoty,
around my tongue, until I’m choked with prose,
apologies rise in my throat
until the bile of unspoken sentances
makes me rasp ineloquent
and excuses grow moss over my teeth.
you love me, you love me not
gorgeous
<3
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The last line was powerful as all hell. If you just wrote that line it stil would have packed a wallop. I'm so surprised this didn't place. The emotions running through you are deep, scathing, powerful and envoke something in me. You have a gift. Use it wisely.
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Wow, thank you so much. I'm actually blown away that you took the time to comment so many of my poems. As soon as I have the chance I need to read a few of yours, I think
I'm very flattered, thank you for making my day.
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You're very welcome! The talent that you have made me want to read more! and as soon as I can I will read more!!!! Keep writing!
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'I am your halfway house
rehabilitation and an easy fuck
all rolled up into one. '
that was my fav. in fact i loved that verse. absolutely powerful.
this whole thing is powerful and haunting, it really runs deep. the ending is lovely, the confession just makes it more of an amazing poem.
<33
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Penned Excellence!
I can't even begin to quote a favorite passage from this incredible pen. The emotions are even from start to finish and 'fear' is most definately felt.
Unatainable love is a fearful foe indeed.
Let the ink flow!
blessings, sandi
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"joints that ache to fold around you
and ears made for the sound of your voice"
those two lines made me shiver and a throb erupted in my chest. I felt a whirlwind howl through my soul. I've felt that way so many times before and the scary part is being able to convince myself that I'm only made for someone who will never have me. Also, I love the word ache, it's one of my favorite words.
"in this sick carousel of desires"
I loved that image, so grand and haunting.
The emotion in this was so fiercely desperate and lonely. It made me hollow but so full of icy emotion. I can't fully describe it.
This is beautiful dear.
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v Megan's got it right!
Soooo good. When I see a new poem of yours I want to read and read and read... -
Fucking awesome. "excuses grow moss over my teeth"
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