She steals the night
She steals the light,
She steals everything that comes her way.
She captures eyes
She captures hearts
She captures all the broken souls,
So you better pray
Death is coming after you
Darkness will cover you
The cold will freeze you
Into the dark shadows of Death’s arms
She rips your heart into pieces
She feeds on your flesh
She drinks your life-giving blood,
To possess eternal youth and beauty
She stares at you, and smiles at you,
She then gives her gratitude
Death is coming after you
Darkness will cover you
The cold will freeze you
Into the dark shadows of Death’s arms
Author notes
I have always been interested in the story of Erzebet Bathory, her family , etc. It is great to see a contest about her! Hahaha. I did not want to make this extremely dark( torture etc.) and of what really happened. Instead, I wrote a song that was inspired by Elizabeth. I hope you enjoy reading this. (Fingers crossed for a Vlad the Impaler contest next
Hahaha)
A contest entry
- Elizabeth Bathory... BLOOD BATH... by Sick Sunshine.
300 points, ended October 28, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Great write, so much darkness. Congrate on the trophy, it is one well earned.
I never heard of this story but now you made me curious so I gotta read it soon. Thanks for sharing!
~Noor
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I just realized you are a champ at dark poetry. I don't see much love stuff coming out, what's up Ylova? Write something romantic too? I don't know the story of Elizabeth Bathory, so I'll just google it. But I can tell you did a wonderful job at summarizing what she was like. So..great work! Congratulations on the bronze too!
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how many times have you died btw
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'She then gives her gratitude' - couldnt understand this line alone.
Apart from this, a bootiful poem this is
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OH! I know this story well... along with other "vampire" tales. You did a most wonderful job. Congrats on your trophy, it was well earned.
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WONDERFUL!!!!!!!!
I have never heard the story but your words are self explanitory, one who only gives out pain and suffering is definitely not one to be around.'s
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Really dark and strong in imagery, and really scary. I think this kind of a poem would make me shart. Beautifully deadly!
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