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Speed of Time

Time flies;

        through endless skies,

Speeding past

        for nothing can last.

Enjoy living;

        both taking and giving.

Leave behind a bright mark;

        like a beacon in the dark

For time waits for no one; 

        when yours is up; you're over and done.


Author notes

"Time flies, and we on it. We cannot stop it; all we can do is sit back and try to hold on tight." <-- quote by Pensitivity. Poem by Symphony.

I intended for this to be more profound / serious. Will come back and contemplate it later!

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • SimplyNoodle
    August 3

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    well written, I like the story thats behind it, how uniqe it is depending on how the reader would inturpert it. Great work here and keep writting, also good luck in the contest.
    I would also like to say sorrry for the contest running so late, Im trying to keep up with it and Im hoping to have it done today.
    Thank you,
    Chelsey.


  • Red Rocket
    May 27
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    Time is its own element. Good write.

  • mountain-woman
    January 18

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    I think you did really good on this prompt and what you said here is so true. I think it says so much and it sounds good with the way you wrote. all the best in the contest, Michele

  • mountain-woman
    January 18
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    Wow


  • TabbyCat
    November 13, 2008

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    Nice rythm here in the words you've chosen...and you've managed to convey a very profound message in only a few lines, without being too preachy.

    "leave behind a bright mark,
    light a beacon in the dark..."

    How positive and inspiring. A nice change from much of the negative/sad material I write and read.


  • Ken-Maverick
    October 29, 2008

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    Niiiiice, well written my friend and so true aswell,
    short yet says all that needs to be said
    Well done

    Good luck in the contest

    Ken


  • Autumn Ginger
    October 28, 2008

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    really well written, nice job! it's so true; nothing ever lasts but if you enjoy the things while your still alive, you benefit in the end. keep writing poems (so that i can read them!)


  • owlish
    October 28, 2008

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    The form is enjoyable. I enjoy the rhyme, and the take on my prompt. Thank you very much for your entry, sis, and for following the rules. Both mean a lot to me!


  • aparnaagarwal
    October 28, 2008

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    you have to improve your poetry
    if you polish it it will be verygood poetry
    love
    aparna agarwal


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 28, 2008
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    I really like the way that you wrote this sis!! Its excellent!!!

  • The Rainbows Mind
    October 28, 2008

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    Well, I actually think that this poem's pretty good. This is why poetry is such a great thing, for after we go, our poetic legacy will live on.
    Many people out there in the world don't understand the profundity of poetry. Life has a time limit, enjoy it while you have it. Poetry however is timeless, and if it has heart and soul, it'll live on forever.

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