A sphere from the eye
Causes tears from the sky
When we see what we're worth
Rain envelops the Earth
A contest entry
- tears that do not fall by Lavender Butterfly.
550 points, ended October 28, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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it comes full circle...
emotional and symmetrical on more than one level...love the use of "envelops" ...you keep writing, I'll keep reading...and remembering...
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Fantastic!!!
In four lines, you project the simplicity of man and his absolute small meaning in Creation. I'll probably go outside sometime and stare at constellations for a while and reflect. I'll do that just because of this poem. As usual, your diverse talents exceeds!!!
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Feeling small in front of the entire universe...nice angle, well penned.Congrats on the HM!
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bravo
It may be short, oh, but it is so wonderfully most excellent! A fine write, indeed! bravo.. bravo... bravo...
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Often taunted by pleasure, what we do for others around us that makes life worthwhile. Imagine being stuck on the plane for three hours waiting to go to Las Vegas?
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Although rather downbeat this is such a powerful statement in so few words. A piece of deep philosophy for those, like me, who tend not to philosophise.
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Overwhelming Realizations! Perfect!
Peace in light and love
Noah
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Stephanie,
Very good. Now I wish I hadwritten that.lol
A winner in my book.
Joe
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