Oh God
you are lonely like me
we are aloof
we are departed
because
we are not expert in
bargaining
so, can serve as allies
can be together
can partake the union
Oh God..
Author notes
Prompt: Frustration.
In a list
A contest entry
- Frustration by Polaja.
1200 points, ended November 13, 2008, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is an interesting take on the prompt
I really like the connection that you are making between yourself and God - and the double usage of 'Oh God' as a expression of both frustration and devotion is clever nicely done!
Thank you for entering
Polly
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emptiness until things are met up or understood
this's soft with strangeness to it. I'm not sure I woukd connote "you are lonely like me
we both are aloof" of such master that arranged for companionship with son, angels and human family... yet extra emphasis on rejoiceable was for us to not nullify longing but be who can brighten for a reply to taunting as though divine is too much for each ~ proverbs isn't for bulk like Psalms 78:41, those gathered to be his people can 'pain' him marginalizing how he wants to provide. opened my eyes to oh.
so all/ill of "partake/departed" does seem to question stances when we aren't magnetized to get one, for instance way we don't have to make our own fight and excuse isn't for unscathed over 'turning other cheek' like jugular check of do you want to do this oppositely to plunging involvement forgetting we aren't to be predator in that update per se -- maybe back to not retaliating ultimate relationship of why with the cause/ and he reregards by that tenderest need
delvably beautiful; I hope I've a little careful looking too,
called Carolyn -
there is much feeling here, truly an excellent write
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there is so much truth in these few lines.
God is also lonley, He wants to be loved, yet people never think of this. They think He is some holy santa clause, someone to take their selfish wants to and plead for things they do not need.
I think the religious systems are full of brats and God needs a friend He can talk to.
omg.
I wish you luck in the contest.
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As it says in the Bible:
Philippians 4:6
"Be anxious for nothing, but in everything by prayer and supplication, with thanksgiving, let your requests be made known to God;..."
God craves the relationship as much as we. Very unique take on this prompt my friend.
Paul
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Man, do I feel this one!...Frustration perfectly written and yet somehow your words bring comfort and calm. Thanks for sharing this one. Peace and best wishes in the contest. Rhonda
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To find a mid-point is where all the power and securities lie. This is something I've learned, and there's really no room for error, either way.
Don't forget; together we are one, Divided we fall,
aloof but not gone, Here and There.
Let's find Life.
Thank you for sharing, I Loved reading this.
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each line has so much depth. thank you.
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Ah, wow!! I liked this specially the last stanza, it was so deep. Indeed what you state here can't be more true. Amazing write as usual. Best of luck in the contest.
~Noor
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