A heart losing beat,
frantic hand massages,
and fancy air pump,
" functions collapsing"-
echoing in mind,
attempts to wake him, invain.
Flat pulse,
meets tears cascade
till I am sent
out of emergency,
a life moved on
in front of my eyes,
conversation
of past midnight
becoming cherished memory.
Salty crystals
drown my soul,
as his wish turned true,
to die in my hands.
In a list
A contest entry
- Say It All by Aun Ali.
600 points, ended October 28, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wonderful. you are very gifted and I look forward to reading more of your work! bravo!
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Thank you for your compliment!
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Very sad and well written.
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Some moments become etched in our minds for ever I guess
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oh you just caused me many tears with this one! I've watched both my father-in-law pass away , and my own father take their last breath...never easy to recall the memories...but sadly a part of life...excellent write...blessings always...best to you in the contest sissy...love ya~ Trisha~
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Nice to know you understand and sorry too for all you had to go through...This happened last month and so fresh in my mind
Firdous
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Seeing your life flash before your eyes in those last moments not being able to reach out to those we love and tell them we will be alright and always be with them. Wonderful and thought provoking write. Good luck in the contest I know you will do well. hugs Theresa
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Yes, there is that surge of emotions racing through your heart... Glad you understand
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This is interesting I really like the second Stanza and yes it does give you thoughts to ponder over thanks for sharing good luck in the contest be well
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This is something what I felt when my father-in-law passed away in front of my eyes..
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Good one, nicely written. Thank you to enter these words in the contest and all the best.
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