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Deep in Beautiful Green Eyes

 
 
I see fire in the beautiful green eyes
of he who loves me
 
When I tell him I did
Once again

Sadness decends

Promises broken

Trust betrayed

 

Forgive me

 

 

 

 

 

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Hurting myself is my own fault, but telling him I did it again is the hardest thing in the world.
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  • misterfish
    November 2, 2008

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    "I see fire in the beautiful green eyes"
    I just love that line. Maybe thats just me.

    Very well written. Short, but sweet.


  • Kiddy
    October 29, 2008

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    Hey nicely ended... Good one...
    Trust betrayed - good word choice...

    All the best.
    Love
    Kiddy


  • Leonura
    October 28, 2008
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    deeply expressive. somehting truly heartfelt and emotional.


  • Lavender Butterfly
    October 28, 2008
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    deeply expressive... x


  • Hannie
    October 28, 2008
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    naww great poem dani....so very very well written !!


  • chilali
    October 28, 2008

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    Amazing take on the prompt! Great work. Good luck to you in the contest

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