The willow throws her net into the sky
To catch a school of swallows flying by.
The birds eat pesky bugs right off the Willow’s skin
And deposit fertilizer in the soil she’s sitting in.
With symbiotic teamwork
both bird and willow win.
A contest entry
- Epigrammatically Speaking by Peripatetic.
1500 points, ended November 12, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nature’s cooperative complexity is a wonderful design. The lesson of it delivered in this earthy poem is that no form of life lives in a vacuum – nor can it – apart from others.
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This is very clever, and very cute. I really liked the way you made Nature into a being, with thoughts and actions and all of that.
Of course it's not a sin; just when it lands on us does it become a sin.
Thank you for sharing, and best of luck in the contest! -
there's a listen up rhythm
you do have this metered from informative tone for gathering entertained schooling almost, to an engaged outcome of tailed tale that is gauged more than gouged...
aspects of personifying the tree {of creation} involvingly throughout heightens accountability within the ecosystem. especially animating vulnerability with gender bias maybe. we aren't (doubly) desensitized to shock at "The birds eat pesky bugs right off the Willow's skin" when next it is as earth's base -- so convoluted for life but not falling up short.
I don't know where you'd want this brightened but it kept my attention,
called Carolyn -
Hmmmm....
Interesting theory
I hadn't thought of it that way before. Well done and best of luck in this contest 
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the
visual was amazing and gross really original too good luck in the contest 
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Such an intriguing write. truly had the reader thinkin'.
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