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Drink Myself To Sleep

 

 

It was warm, the liquid in the bottle,

It burned my throat, the liquid in the bottle

It took my pain away,

Yes, it did..

 

It lead my mind astray.

 

My only friend, the drink in the bottle,

Somehow,

It's insanity makes me sane.. 

 

I've been lied to before

yet,

in this bottle, I now trust.

I've been hurt countless times

yet,

in this bottle, my faith restored...

 

This bottle speaks to me

It sends a message across..

 

"Pop a  few pills

and forever

rest in peace"

Author notes

There were so many different things that I wanted to write based on this phrase but I decided to go with a dark one. It's not at all that great, not even a teeny weeny bit. Hehehe. But yeah. This poem was written in such a flow and so I entered it. Thank you for reading and hope you enjoyed it

About the picture: Found it randomly on Deviant Art. Credit goes to: http://writteninred.deviantart.com/art/Message-in-a-Liquor-bottle-20025836

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    Ooo very dark indeed! I think many of us have tried to find some sort of answer or comfort in a bottle... yet sadly often it only brings you further down and offers thoughts exactly like those at the end!


  • scenescene
    October 29, 2008

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    It's insanity makes me sane.. - a beautiful paradoxical situational line that sure deserves a few pegs of the 'liquid' for ppl quipping in with nice-ncie comments


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    WONDERFUL!!!!

    Yes, many take this road and try to forget but after one drinks to much and the next day with a huge headache the pain is still there. 's


  • Hikari Lady
    October 28, 2008

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    Too dark yet I like it, very nice imaginary and such emotions in the words. I am not a fan of dark writes yet I like writing and reading about them. Best of luck in the contest, you did great in this poem.

    ~Noor


  • Alyzeh
    October 28, 2008

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    Wow. That was an excellent take on the prompt, seriously! I could've never come up with this, muahaha . But honestly, this was powerful in many ways; the message; choice of words. Great work! Good luck in the contest!


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    October 28, 2008

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    Yeah, although i wouldnt encourage it, this is written very beautifully. many of our youth go thru this, and I think you have seen thru their minds. Like the flow of it, brilliantly done!!!

    Loved this piece, I can see that this just flowed from your beautiful mind like your other writes!

    lencio


  • thejollytinker
    October 28, 2008

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    Yeah, we all at some point coddle our insanity by calling it sane. Or maybe that's just me?


  • luna-midnight gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    awww wow...very emotional...and powerful wonderful entry and god luck
    Stephanie ♥


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    So many live life in a bottle, .. blocking out the world that they blame their pain on.
    A brilliant poem that sends a message
    The ending.. comes that bitter end
    Best wishes and good luck hun
    Julie


  • MD Masroor
    October 28, 2008

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    Lol! Not bad a description! I liked it, since the imagery and the meaning here is strong, but I don't think you've expressed the true emotions felt by a drinker! Shame on you Ylova for making a real good poem but not one about true drinkers. Drink more! ;p Good luck in the contest!


    • chilali
      October 28, 2008

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      That is because I am not a true drinker And I do not want to be! Hehehe.


  • Leonura
    October 28, 2008
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    Verra well written. somethin' that is unique and interestin' to read.

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 28, 2008
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    "message in a bottle"

    Let me know if that works for you, otherwise I can give you another

    Take it where you will...

    • chilali
      October 28, 2008
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      It works just fine Thank youu! How many entries are allowed though? I have so many different writes in my head for that phrase Hehehe

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