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Poignant Passion

 

 

 

He entered her realm of  dark fantasy..
"Shut the door behind you" She whispered.
The delicate wind chimes began to sound as he walked in.

She stood there
with such poise
His senses
..they lost control

The dim lights..
They were a perfect fit for the setting

Black satin sheets
Champagne and whipped strawberries

"Come closer, pour me a drink?" She said with a smile.

As he approached the bed side table, his desire for her,
his yearning,
grew stronger

He picked up the glass

and poured her a drink of the bubbly sparkles...
He glanced at her enchanting beauty
as she slowly untied her robe...

 

She showered her breasts with the drink.
Waiting..
Longing
For him to taste..

His face reddened
His desire heightened
This was his mistress,

his temptress,
His satisfying sinful lust

He walked towards her,
She lured him into her deceitful web
Yes..it was a trap

This was her fantasy and this was his reality
What happened that night...
..eternal tragedy...

Author notes

D-Word Bank

(Use atleast 10 words from this list)

Champagne
Door
chime
Poise
Black
Lights
Room
Glass
Shut
Sense
Pour
Toast
Face
crowd
Reality
Lust
Eternal
Tragedy


Words used : Champagne, Door, Chime, Poise, Black, Light, Room, Glass, Shut, Sense, Pour, Face, Reality, Lust, Eternal, Tragedy.

About the picture: I thought this went well with the poem Credit goes to: http://shards-of-glass.deviantart.com/art/Dark-Enchantress-30487351

Oh! Oh! Yes! I almost forgot! I'm addicted to All Poetry! Boo ya!


Option 2: Use these types of food. A few were used.
AP Name: Ylova

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  • The D O M
    December 22, 2008

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    A very enjoyable read but I'm not convinced it was written to a specific AP poet as the contest requested ...


  • kitty23
    December 15, 2008

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    very good
    i liked this one alot
    thank you for entering my contest
    good luck

    Kitty23


  • Pensively Ignorant
    December 12, 2008

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    Very sexy

    I like that you kept the readers hanging by NOT actually describing the sex, but rather what lead up to it, the moment before. Almost hotter then reading hardcore adult writing. I liked the story and flow of this poem. Nice job!


  • Zenda-Lokki
    December 10, 2008

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    Ok I can definately see why it was a good decision to add you as a favourite. You are an amazingly talented poet. Again congrats on the previous trophies and good luck in my contest xx


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    ooo...this is kinda dark yet sexy too...but in such a tasteful manner. I really enjoyed the last few stanzas...brilliantly written, I must say!!!

    just wow





  • Mistressofthedark
    December 4, 2008

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    Fantastic!

    You are an amazing writer! I loved this one very much as well. Very nicely done! May I add you to my favorites?


  • Rhythm Child
    November 23, 2008

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    i dont think i have ever read such a good use of a word bank, this told such a story i was kind of holding my breath the whole way through, the end was brilliant i really wasnt expecting that

    only thing i was unsure of 'whipped strawberries'
    did u mean that or whipped cream and strawberries lolz

    i hope you take alook at my contest or more hopefully group id really love for you to join and i have seen your comments on some really good friends

    take care


  • CrystalMoon7290
    November 15, 2008

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    This was an EXCELLENT read! I especially liked the lines "This was her fantasy and this was his reality
    What happened that night...
    ..eternal tragedy..." That was just beautiful. And the picture you used fit very well with this poem.


  • badnovocaine
    November 5, 2008

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    She stood there
    with such poise
    His senses
    ..they lost control

    ooo I dont know how this poem can be bad
    I liked this one i thought it was very tasteful, especially what I pasted above. Well done on using the wordbank the words flowed rather nicely.
    I thought that this was packed with flavor. I kind of like reading my poem and then reading yours because we both used the same option, because its two totally different poems done in various styles.
    Anyways this is very tastefully done and I like that.
    Good luck in the contest.


  • Alyzeh
    November 5, 2008

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    Okay, an excellent poem, I loved the brilliant use of words from the word bank and the picture added to the whole feel of this poem. Amazing imagery and a stunning write for sure. Thank you for entering, good luck in the contest.


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    I loved this poem
    Sensually brilliant, such imagery the story so lustful
    then the fatal trap
    Word bank fitted so well within
    Best wishes in the contest
    Much love Julie x


  • Hikari Lady
    October 28, 2008

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    God lord! This was... AMAZING!!! Such vivid imaginary and wonderful twist, I found myself pulled to the story drinking every word. Wonderful job. Best of luck in the contest!

    ~Noor


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    October 28, 2008

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    Ylova, you know what you are so still young and still a complete writer! thats what I admire about you. This is such an amazing write.

    Lencio


  • Jesann gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    Awesome!!!
    You certainly draw the reader in to an alluring web (story) an interesting twist "...her fantasy..his reality.....eternal tragedy" Well done!!!!


  • thejollytinker
    October 28, 2008

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    Damn, baby- Ouch!!!  Hope you're happy, the water in the aquarium is boiling and I just shot the dog...  Now, keep in mind, I'm an old man...  Really that was super- understated and dangerous, yet sexy as hell.


  • MD Masroor
    October 28, 2008

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    Okay, I'm loosing this competition to you for sure. 1st of all, that was partly erotic. And you said you didn't do those, so you lied. Liar! And secondly, it was dark, and scary in the end. The imagery was just strong enough to make me feel the lust and then loose it due to a sudden twist. Thank you for the good time, i mean, read ;p Good luck with the contest!

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