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You are elegance personified

every subtle nuance

of your femininity

 

draws me closer

as our bodies heave

to a slow syncopation

 

and we glide

like stallion and rider

as one, spellbound

 

moving to a crescendo

of warm flesh

and sighs.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

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Prompt: "Mesmerized by your movement"

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  • notorious gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    This could easily be something Jackkksss wrote.

    'personified'<==kick-ass use of this

    "like stallion and rider"
    So good. I only wish it was in a different context.

    Jessica


  • lunarlunacy
    November 3, 2008
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    simply seductive. good write and best of luck with the contest.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    Oh so beautiful and softly sensual. Gives the heart a sigh and makes one mesmerized by your words!


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    "as one, spellbound
    moving to a crescendo
    of warm flesh
    and sighs."

    this is so lovely


  • nevadapoet
    October 28, 2008
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    "glide like sta;lion and rider"...beautiful imagery. The whole piece id beautiful.
    Shelly


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    This is a sigh poem...so elegant, so vey sensual. Loved the sense of movement here....and the rhythm!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Amera gold member
    October 28, 2008
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    *sigh*



    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Leonura
    October 28, 2008
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    oi, tis beautiful and lovingly sensual as well. wonderfully written, and expressed.

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