I lie here...
beneath the frozen grass
No longer able to see the stars in you're eyes
I tried to walk away
Yet death gripped my sight
I am unable to let go
Incapable of moving this stone heart
I drowned myself in tears
I wash the sins clean from my mind also
Eventhough I am cleaned...
my spirit remains filthy
I will forever remain who I was
I prayed for motionless
Though my death is now emotionless
Author notes
you sent me the prompt "motionless"
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Comments
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Again another fabulous write. I became a tad confused with these lines as to what was meant by the writer to convey to the reader
I will forever remain who I was
I prayed for motionless
Though my death is now emotionless
Does this mean that You have no emotion of your death or that others would have no emotion. Perhaps I am over analyzing again.
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Ahh I have felt this way before! A dark, sad write that captures the prompt well! Love the ending with the motionless/emotionless comparison
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"Motionless"
Let me know if that works for you, or I can give you another
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