my hood does little
to stop the piercing rain from
rattling my bones,
wishing listlessly for your
all encompassing soft arms
to cover and warm
my saturated chest and
heart, gone cold from lack
of love and affection, so
swallow me whole with yourself
so that my soul can
send shivers down "your" spine, so
you can see how you
like the feeling of lonely
days, and solitary nights
where stars would fall on
tiny houses of neglect,
to illuminate
that small heaven created
by our interlocking souls
memories such as
these, warm me on those cold days
when both sun and moon
are not in the heavens, but
laid out behind your soft hair
Author notes
Extended! (no more additions will take place)
A contest entry
- Bang Bang, my baby shot me down... by Sick Sunshine.
400 points, ended November 10, 2008, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"when both sun and moon
are not in the heavens"
startling that you said that.
The picture of myself I titled it
on a different website as
"return of the moonless sky"
your reading my mind...
please do enter more than once.
I liked that you added more to it.
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O coincidences, heheh. Thanks for reading and commenting!
P.S. I might add more, depends if I get inspired again.
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Are you kidding? This isn't cheesy at all! I lovvve this one...I've related to the image it portrays too many times to count. I love you <3
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Loved this... really moving.. Enjoyed it very much!
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Thanks for reading and commenting!
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This is very emotional, But I feel like you wanted to go further with this one. It may be just me though
Its a greay write, soul encompassing.
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Hmm, two people want it to be longer, maybe...
Thanks for reading and commenting!
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wow. just wow.. This poem is just right on.
hit the spot. damn.. I only wish it was longer.
very good write. feel free to enter more than once..
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Thanks for reading and commenting!
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