Birthday Girl (Acrostic)

Blue Fire it's your Birthday soon
I'd like to sing you a tune
Really tho my singing sucks
There'll be lots of things deluxe
Happy people bringing gifts
Day's start to end...spirit lifts
All day long will be for you
Yay for you...I say WOO HOO!

Good things I wish for your day
It's mine in November...YAY
Really hope your Birthday ROCKS
Lots of prezzies in a box

Author notes

Hope you have a wonderful Birthday on 12th...mine is on the 2nd

What did you think

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By me, right now

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Blue Fire
November 2, 2008
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well like 5 or 7
- Theotherme
  November 4, 2008
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  It says on your author page that you are 10...right??? Sorry if you think my poem is too childish for you. If it's not what you're looking for please feel free to remove it from your contest. I hope you have a great Birthday.
Blue Fire
November 2, 2008
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uhhhh just so u know im not a little kid
Unforgotten
October 28, 2008

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please
use real word? sucks? that's not poetry.

prezzies? that's not a real word at all.

it just felt... lazy. i'm sure you could have wrote this with a lot more talent or display of skill.
- Theotherme
  October 28, 2008
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  Thank you for your honest opinion on my poem. I am sorry you don't like the words I've chosen so as it rhymes. I guess they must be just Aussie slang I'm sure if the contest holder doesn't like it it will be removed Thanks again for your honesty...I appreciate it.
Jeremy0826
October 28, 2008

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LOL! You did it again!
I love the way that you put this together
here. Good luck to you with this great write!

Jeremy0826
- Theotherme
  October 28, 2008
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  Thank you again for taking the time to read my poem