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Simple Emotion

she's
so

  ~
f
  i
n
  e
~

She's -hot- as fire and -cool- as ice.

She's precious perfect, a
~ParAdoX & ParAgoN~

She dances and she breathes and she thinks
and that's why I
♥ ~ love her ~ ♥

Author notes

This is me experimenting a little more w/ dirty pretty.

Do me a favor, and stare at the word "fine" for a little bit. Does it look like it's moving (but not moving) and weirdly squiggly to you?

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Comments

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  • Stevie.me
    July 23

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    Smashing Job

    Made me smile. I like how you included so my aspects of who she is not just how she's hot, but how she's cool and precious and a thinker too. Great Job


  • trekkergirl
    July 14

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    I like the way you wrote this one. Very creative. And the words worked well with the way you wrote this one. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest


  • Animals
    May 1
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    Good luck!


  • Kathraina silver member
    March 16
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    This is very sweet ^.^


  • jayyniecakes.
    February 16

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    the bottom line is dirty pretty :]
    and so is the fine spelled down


    but you need to fix the rest

    look at xxcadibabixx for inspiration
    she writes amazing dirty pretti

    :]


  • Kathraina silver member
    February 1
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    Judged-ola!

    that hurt my eyes lolz (the (not)/moving "fine") lolz good write btw

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