I try to feel no pain
When you rip my heart out into bits
I try not to cry
When your words are like a slap in the face
I try to breathe
When you continue to throw punches
Taking the air out of my lungs
I have nothing left to give
I only try
Author notes
bad love i guess
have no idea where the 2 line preview came from, but i like it. may let Lady D do something with it... hmm... She's the knightess... I will have to pass this on to her.
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Aww I like it very good write
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WOW! Excellent work! So short, yet so powerful. I really liked the "I have nothing left to give/ I only try." There have been a couple rough spots where I've felt that way with my boyfriend...but more metaphoric punches than actual... Anyway, fantastic work, I wouldn't change a thing. Great work and good luck in the contest! --Shannon
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the puches were meant as metaphorical actually
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hmm... carry your armor on your back and get over it... i will see what i can do with that prompt. thanks, z.
as for the poem, it's kinda sad, and I hope that this is not personal in any way, which you messaged me that it wasn't... better not be, or i will have his hide.
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