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the abandoned world





the darkness no longer speaks to me,
i cannot see the stars

we were on a train,
there was a terrible silence

i forgive you, i forgive you,
i forgave you long ago

there is light coming through an open door
the sun, spilling from your arms

i hold fresh cherries in my mouth, Queen Anne’s
they resist my teeth, break so sweetly it hurts

suffering follows me,
but it is not mine


the worth of your hands on my body
knows no restraint

i will float upon the waves of your sea, salt
there is no need for shore

we skim, there,
just beneath the surface

laughter is distorted underwater,
it sounds like drowning

and i can hear the mermaids
singing

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  • Jettison
    October 29, 2008
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    this could be me, in a poem.

    for real.


    • philosphyofkate
      October 29, 2008
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      hooray!! this is a good poem to have be you.

      today, while i was helping my aunt move into her new apartment, my best friend called. well, my old best friend, who i haven't really spoken to since i missed her wedding, when i was in the hospital. but the cell reception was bad and all that i got was that she was going to be in town.

      it reminds me why i spent so long being addicted to everything in my grasp


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    "i will float upon the waves of your sea, salt
    there is no need for shore"

    this is very beautiful, reads dreamlike, abstract...but you give the reader just enough