Spank me a dream so surreal
with Freudian gloves
dipped in parental screams.
Death cries and love's reply
Shot thru a prism of hat tricks
with a gustapo raygun.
Right thru the center.
Refracting into Alice's looking glass
with morbid curiosity
at a slain chesire cat
…and the mad hatter left cum stains at the scene
Author notes
metaphorical expressions on how I view my current writting style.
A contest entry
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Comments
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this was freakish lol the style was crazy nice and i was impressed with what you brought to the table a little different good luck in the contest
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A write that was written so well and I love your metaphors! Good luck
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Fun!
Nice poem & fun -- except last line -- it's not quite "family friendly!" Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!
Could you re-word the last line for me, please?
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naw, thats ok i will just remove it this eve. thanx
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this is darker than what i generally like, but i like it a lot
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Yep abstract metaphorical, this is you for sure...of the edge and still looking...so creative and cool you are with a touch of sarcasm always so well done...you are an unique...
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of the edge and still looking... hell yeah, exactly. thank ya gal, much appreciated
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See he did that to me too, i swear i am going to find that Hatter, and i am going to kick his ass, i told him watch where he hit, nasty mofo, lol, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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he is a rascal aint he
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Love the abstract nature of this, something I don't do yet but aim to try. Nice job.
MM
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LMAO.. this is so your style alright... totally unique and creepy cool
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grins sheepishly
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Deep and creepy, hoss, but me likes it
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Well...when you said metaphorical you sure hit the nail on the head
Great poem and I wish you the best of luck in this contest
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