The quintessence zone!
do you dare behold it?
do you dare enter alone?
Enter the key on the xylophone
any tune that fits your whim
i wonder - what might you find
if you happen to waltz in?
i wonder - will you think it kind?
it would burn your mind!
no degree of fortitude
nor force nor eulogy
could enough praise thee,
oh quintessence zone.
fields of gold? unknown?
no surprise asperity
pressure plenty to succeed
and enough for insecurity
only justice to leave wake
no law or memory too opaque
to hold any child unsafe
yesterday's tomorrow's home
inside quintessence zone.
even darkest midnights shone
inside quintessence zone.
A contest entry
- Word Bank by Ravenblood.
900 points, ended January 24, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I may try to keep working on this poem - feedback would be FANTASTIC
Comments
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looked up quintessence
im a little confused. happy but confused.
i like "no surprise asperity/ pressure plenty to succeed/ and enough for insecurity"
it just sounds soo nice.
lovely as usual. don't really have negative feedback. as usual. sorry i couldn't criticize. -
great use of the word bank, awsome piece.
i liked it
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