Hello, my name is your death wish.
Hello, my name is forgotten.
Hello, my name is beyond your reach of comprehension.
Hello, my name is lost inside a sea of voices.
Welcome to reality,
the face of inequality.
Welcome to self hate;
welcome to, too late.
Please take off forgiveness, leave it at the door.
Please twist your face in a mask of, painfully sure.
Sure of all the worthlessness, now.
Sure that you're a relic of the past, now.
Oh, take a bow, you've played an important part;
in the demise of what we now call the world.
Say goodbye to serenity,
say hello to calamity.
The end of everything is taking place,
unsurpassed in anguish, this is calmer; this space.
May the courage be remembered,
hello to finality; it's finally over.
Author notes
written at the piano.
its a song,
basically to the chords E-, C, B-
yeahhhhh son 
thanks for the read
Tell me what you think.
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Refreshing!
Unlike some of the other comments.......I too am a composer of music and song.
I LIKE the first line....It details the rest of the poem!
Yes it is dark....but in a satirical way. The verbiage is concise and well placed. I DO like this offering>
I suspect a rather slow etherial sound would make this come alive....echoes at the microphone in specific spots would be a great touch. Just a suggestion.
Nice job
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i agree with one of the other readers, this is kind of gloomy. i don't particularly like gloomy and dark reads. i read this through and could not relate. the writing itself is good.
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you did a fantastic job. I didn't really like the first stanza, but I loved the rest of it. keep up the awesome work.
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WOW
i love it it is soo intense good write i look forward to more of your work
great job i love you bubba!!
angela
aka angel of the dead
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aw thanks, sister.
it's like.. the only thing I've written all year
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I really enoyed reading this because its diffferent to the usal poems. the first verse was great, it attracted me and made me want to read more. i like the words, the way you structed it - a great piece - "Please twist your face in a mask of, painfully sure" fantastic lines, took my breath awy, great write,xx
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thanks so much for the comment!
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Excellent! I loved reading it, and I could definitely see this sung along to a piano. The first stanza was a perfect way to open this piece. Thanks for sharing!
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thanks for the comment!
yeah, the rhyming makes a little bit more sense when its sung (Y)
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Fantastic
I really, really liked it. It takes some bad past experiences to understand this poem/song. But its meaning was. . . SO understandable.
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thanks for the comment!
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The lyrics suggest some sort of hell. A seperation from God's love. I don't like it, it's gloomy, lol.
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hahah it's not really about a seperation from god's love, seeing as that's kinda what I'm trying to surround myself in.
but yes, it's gloomy. :]
thanks for the comment!
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