we lifted into trees,
hugs and subordinate clauses
drifting out one window and
into another: your private admiration
my attempted conclusion. and who
passed the tissues in midsummer
night's dream? who tilted their
very own pillow under my curly head?
who left copious amounts of scribbled
beloved gestures onto legal pad paper
into my locker?
we clung to brand new, shifting
out of molds. i whispered things
to the plastic window, you cried
at the prairie. sometimes it was
canada, but mostly it was northfield
and i wept for the heart i left behind.
we breathed in the moon; you
cut out of town and slept next to me
under rain. i inflicted metaphorical
cuts into my flesh and showed you
when i came in winter. the
summer brought us back.
we reach for peaches, stifling
the urge to gallop. i am magnetically
unsure of how my legs will move, you
have open arms and two dimples. who will
dig up grassroots with me? your place
or mine? who will kiss away the dewdrops
that spring from my eyes? when will the
forces collide, providing our deepest
desires with ample satisfaction? what,
love?
.you.
it was always you.
Author notes
a long distance relationship
makes you feel every dip, rock and hill in between the two of you.
quirky. like me, i suppose.
A contest entry
- keep it close by the atlantic.
1750 points, ended November 10, 2008, 19 entries
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well really there is no point in highlighting my favorite bits because everything was fabulous but I am going to anyway.
"you cried
at the prairie. sometimes it was
canada, but mostly it was northfield
and i wept for the heart i left behind.
we breathed in the moon; you
cut out of town and slept next to me
under rain. i inflicted metaphorical
cuts into my flesh and showed you
when i came in winter. the
summer brought us back."
Well i looooooved this part. Because it had Canada in it haha and prairies. <3andd the heart you left behind thing. Made me think. I don't even know where northfield is!
I wonder where you were before, where your love is. how far apart are you?
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I love the breathing the moon and leaving town and rain. Ooooh goodness romanticcc<3.
& i loved the metaphoircal cuts. That was just genius and perfect and relatable and then just giving it that sharing, like showing those cuts? I don't know just very healing. The summer =] .
"we reach for peaches, stifling
the urge to gallop. i am magnetically
unsure of how my legs will move, you
have open arms and two dimples. who will
dig up grassroots with me? your place
or mine? who will kiss away the dewdrops
that spring from my eyes? when will the
forces collide, providing our deepest
desires with ample satisfaction?"
L♥VE
what can i say, extremely just..that awkward love? That freshly formed jewel of affection and connection? All the questions aer just so perfect, so natural and so real.
When will the forces collide oooooh<33.
i dont knowww!
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I am HeadOverHeels in looove with this it is so great. WooO! The party in my mouth version of a poem. ♥
you are so lovely.xo -
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
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my goodness ooooh what a lovely thing you have made♥
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wowwww. this is incredible. I don't even know what to say. will you publish this please?
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ps- you and dooley have been rocking lately. not that you haven't always been amazing, but just lately I've been rocked by stuff you both write.
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really? i don't feel rockin'. i feel a bit blocked, i've lost focus of homework and shit. i need to get my shit together.
shit.
thanks. dooley's been rocking, though.
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