Below the fall of the reign of Us
Our world; beyond the extraordinary fell
A lifetime of waiting and pacing the wall
Remained fractured
The land torn in two;
our universe collides
Into a celestial battallion
At the foot of the Queen
Author notes
Prompt: Title--Learning to Fall
A contest entry
- it starts with one. by aanika.
910 points, ended November 13, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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nice write.
I'd have preferred something longer and more emotional
but I loved the phrase:
Our world; beyond the extraordinary fell
A lifetime of waiting and pacing the wall
Remained fractured
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descriptive. this has such strong and powerful imagery, it just grabs the reader. you've used the prompt well. keep penning
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your title is:
learning to fly
or
learning to fall.
I couldn't decide.
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