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Released

  

  untie me

 

  while I tremble under

  fingertips touched

  to tender places

 

  and tongue tempts

  my surrender

 

  as pleasurable it

  probes sweet offering

 

  then I ache eager

  for masculine firmness

  to drive desire

 

  deep into the less explored

 

  a plunging of flesh

  in mutual tempo

 

  building breathless

  to feverish pitch

 

  until heated surge

  releases us 

  to sensual sensation

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt # 2 Pic (found at photobucket.com)

(hmm... lol)

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  • geckogirl silver member
    March 25

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    hon this is a very hot sensual piece, a gold well deserving....


  • Valley Girl silver member
    December 2, 2008

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    Awesome take as usual! Congratulations on the Gold! It is well deserved for such a sensual steamy write! ♥


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    November 21, 2008
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    Another piece that left me a tad hot under the collar...

    As always, a fantastic piece that didn't fail to stir an emotional response...
    Well done!!!


  • Swan song gold member
    November 20, 2008
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    Wow!!!! Dear this is awesome!


  • MD Masroor
    November 8, 2008

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    You weren't kidding when you said you're sensual poems were actually sensual. Wow. The flow, the structure, and even the image was just crystal clear. Great job on the gold! You deserved it! Congrats!


  • JinSays gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    then I ache eager

    for masculine firmness

    to drive desire



    deep into the less explored

    And the devious smile on my face is witness enough, you so totally rock, my lovely sister girl. Just takes all my flimsy writes and burns them down completely. A testament to your unwavering ability to express exquisite detailed erotica.
    Congrats on another beautiful trophy,
    Jin

  • Rmh4933
    November 3, 2008

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    Magnificent

    This work shows outstanding ,strong and very sensual imagery for mindplay. Well written, well done. I love it all.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 3, 2008
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    Hot Gold!
    Joe

  • Mickie27
    November 2, 2008

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    so wonderfully written it was very erotic, but not over the top at all.It was all very sensual and lovely.


  • November-Dani
    November 1, 2008
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    Awesome.
    Dani.


  • PerVirtuous
    October 31, 2008

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    Your sexual frustrations seem to inspire great poetry. As soon as I read some crappy sensual stuff from you I will know exactly what it means and wonder who and how much.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    October 31, 2008

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    Well done on the Gold...this is excellent as always...love the sensual soft metaphor...so wonderfully enticing...great words for a great picture...love it!

    sis


  • nancy drew
    October 31, 2008
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    oh my, i'm blushing.! lol


    helen~


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    October 30, 2008

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    Very sensual Sis! I love this...so GOLD it is!!!


    Az

  • carole21
    October 30, 2008
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    nicely penned . . congrats on the gold !!


  • stavykm gold member
    October 29, 2008

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    Excellent

    Wow I just loved this. What a great sensual poem. Congradulations on the gold for it was well deserved. I love the picture too. Oh yes release me already... LOL

    Love Ya Sis,
    Kelle


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 29, 2008

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    Damn this is one very very sensual & hot poem. with that said...hmmm ahh yes you've done a wonderful job with your poem. You captured me with the first line of your poem. just threw out the line & reeled me right on in.
    the imagery is brilliant in this piece & paints a vivid picture in my mind...

    good luck

    kat & Jeremy


  • Alyzeh
    October 29, 2008

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    SO very sensual. I love the colors in the picture by the way, the lovely lilac. Very well written, loved it. Good luck in the contest!


  • Yorkshire kevin
    October 29, 2008
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    WOW
    What a read, sensual at it's best, it woke me up this morning lol


  • chilali
    October 29, 2008

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    Extremely well written. Very, very sensual! I loved this. Good luck to you in the contest


  • The Gambler
    October 28, 2008

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    Oh my God! This is most likely the most erotic poem I have ever read! It’s penned with so much class but it sure pulls my trigger. This is brilliant poetry my friend.

  • SoulWhispher
    October 28, 2008

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    Well Done

    Seems that your muse is not dead
    For your words do breathe fire

    Reading and enjoying such work
    Of that I will never tire

    So this is a golden write
    And a sure contest winner

    Makes me then want to be
    Just another sinner


    Great job, I really enjoyed this, blessings with Love John

  • chiefmac
    October 28, 2008

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    Hot and sensual. The reader is drawn into steamy images of pleasure and release of those strongest urges.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    All I can say is, for a dead muse he certainly still has some life in him
    One day I'll let you teach me your secret...a fantastic write, worthy of gold.

    All the best
    Sue

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    WOW. Already sees the gold trophy on this lol great piece boy you took the picture and made it speak good luck in the contest be well


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    Steam fills my mind when I read this beautiful sexy and enticing write
    Best wishes in the contest hun
    Julie xx


  • notorious gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    LMFAO

    I could leave it at that,
    but I won't.

    So the lack of punctuation and capitalizations...fucking awesome! (Note use of the word 'fucking' )
    LoL...what an ass I am, pointing out my stupid pun.

    "probes sweet offering"

    LoL. 'probes' always makes me think of docs and gynecologists, but here, it's bloody...sexy.

    Is this the blue or the pink swing...
    or both? LMAO.

    "in mutual tempo"
    So good...don't like the context, but it works very very very effectively, so I won't complain.

    And that last stanza...you always end your sex poems with fire.

    Which definitely works.

    Bet you win.

    Jessica


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    She swings...and it's a grand slam into center field folks, it's out of the park! Whoo hoo!


    Very nice piece Jackie.


  • Mistressnomaster
    October 28, 2008

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    chuckles...never been in that position but I have done it a few times the other way round

    MM

  • Bob Fox
    October 27, 2008
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    Oh God

    The pressure is building. Where is the ice water? And that body. The gods are great.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 27, 2008

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    OH HELL YEH !!!

    Your words pumping excitement
    my desire driving back at you
    'til we crescendo into
    our sensual sensations.


    Ahhh yes, just what I needed tonight.


  • Amera gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    Fantastic! I'll read it one more time then I'll go take a cold shower.


    Love,
    Amera♥

    • Pure Thought silver member
      October 27, 2008
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      *shock* OH NO !!!

      Not a cold shower, that would be a waste.

    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      October 27, 2008
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      Thanks sis!! Wasn't sure about it lol.. but glad I got that reaction


  • Cannonsfire
    October 27, 2008

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    Don't change it too much, I like it the way it is...sensual and so er firm C


  • CherokeeSiren
    October 27, 2008
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    Phew somebody fan me! Nice job.


  • Rclane gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    You do what you wish...but I think it is fine the way it is....excuse me while I check my heart rate....Ok It's still beating....don't think I could read it again .
    Very nicely done. Best to you in contest....


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    WOW! Very sensual....very, very! But so well written, your muse is tricking you, there he is alive and kicking in each line! Flows like a dream, beautifully done hunni, good luck in the contest but you shouldn't need it


  • thejollytinker
    October 27, 2008

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    DISPATCH:  "Uh, yes, we have a tanker-truck that just smashed through a barrier on Highway KGJ, south, please respond."

     

    DRIVER:  "Roger that, HQ- we just need to catch our breath..."

     


  • DolceVito gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    Yummy, extraodinary sensual write...Time for another cold shower, darn it!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    October 27, 2008

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    I agree with Swan! Very sensual and passionate!
    Thanks a lot for your entry and good luck to you in our contest!




    Jeremy0826

  • Swan song gold member
    October 27, 2008
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    Wowza this could wake the dead! Beautiful Stunning

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