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mouth money

all ties are cut

in intersections

and dead air

along aluminum wires

 

coins bleed tension

through quarter slots

and voices

chewing through static

thick as midnight

on Independence Day.

 

my lips will quiver

against pigeon holes

and tongue-tips - 

 

nickels etching

into glass casings.

 

 

I'm alive.

 

 

 

I'm still breathing.

 

 

 

 

Can you hear me?

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: http://marksda1.deviantart.com/art/London-Calling-31997687


you know that feeling you get when you're screaming at the top of your lungs and everyone just walks by?

that's what this reminds me of.

I counted 59 words, but I could be wrong.

DQ if it's not what you're looking for, I tried. =]

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  • Nicada silver member
    November 24, 2008

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    A neat write with amazing imagery used. Great job, and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 29, 2008

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    Very cool poem! I absolutely know the feeling the poem is expressing. Excellent!


  • notorious
    October 29, 2008

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    This is super cool.

    First stanza: Just loved it; it's full of unique and poetic phrases, and the correct spelling of 'aluminum' is duly noted. I love "dead air"; we need air to survive, but it's dead. What a thought.

    I kind of think the word 'bleed' is the most overused verb ever...but I did love "thick as midnight/on Independence Day"; it makes me think of infinite darkness.

    Third stanza: Kick-ass imagery.

    Thanks for entering.

    Jessica


  • Leonura
    October 28, 2008
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    Emotional and intense. something that screams with no voice.


  • notorious
    October 28, 2008
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    'alluminum'==>

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