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Blood Bath

I wonder why i cant cry.
I wonder why i cant seem to rely
on you anymore.
I cant seem to feel anything anymore.
No more broken hearts because i wont
take it anymore.
The pain that you brought to my life?
I cant feel life anymore
I cant seem to care for you anymore.
I dont want you back.
But i do want to show you
my masterpeice.
A small gift, from me to you.
Follow the trail of blood.
into the hospital room.
Isn't it pretty.
This is what i call...
My blood bath

A contest entry

It was very painful to bleed out of my throat but also a memoriable one.

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  • Coolcolec
    October 27, 2008
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    Scary

    It describes of how i had my life threatning throat injury and how painful it was to see the blood pouring out of my mouth.


  • PoetryStar2
    October 27, 2008
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    this is good alot of thought and contemptment good luck in the contest