My name was richykins
When I first found myself here
Why I'd choose such a silly name
Is still kind of unclear
In time I took the dive
Really liked a band named Live
One song title jumped out at me
And I knew that's what my new name had to be
Heropsychodreamer..
While I may not like the band as much
The name still has a special touch
It just seems to perfectly
Describe all the things going on with me
Sometimes I feel heroic
Selfless, giving, wanna save the world
But sometimes I feel crazy
Like a whole new person, unfurled
I never see the treasure gleaming
'Cause I'm always far too busy dreaming
But these three words put together
Make me feel happy to be me.
Author notes
I don't know if this is too long or not, if so let me know.
A contest entry
- All Poetry Names by Riftkin.
700 points, ended November 6, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I love how you were kind enough to enter my contest.
It is great to see another poet.
Best of Luck here.
Riftkin
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No, thank You, your contest was fun :-).
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This is so well worded, I love it a delightful piece of writing !!!Thanks for sharing this
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A very cool username!
I think your poem had very good rhythm and rhyme. My only thought was to maybe break it up into stanzas to give the reader a chance to absorb what your saying. One long stanza doesn't give them a breather. 
Perhaps something like this. Just a thought and feel free to ignore it! I really liked the way you expressed yourself in this!
While I may not like the band as much
The name still has a special touch
It just seems to perfectly
Describe all the things going on with me
Sometimes I feel heroic
Selfless, giving, wanna save the world
But sometimes I feel crazy
Like a whole new person, unfurled
I never see the treasure gleaming
'Cause I'm always far too busy dreaming
But these three words put together
Make me feel happy to be me.
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Thanks for the comment, I wrote this in a hurry, and you're totally right about how it should be separated, thanks! :-)
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Your very welcome. I hesitate sometimes as people don't like suggestions so I usually try to get a feel for what they are really looking for. I'm glad you are one of the cool ones.
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Hero psycho dreamer - sounds like a poet! I don't have trouble holding onto the name; it's the avatars that can't suit me from oneminute to the next. I think there needs to be a variety available for depending on what you are saying!
A happy poem here; good luck in the contest.
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Yeah, definitely, I wanted to write something more serious and, i guess odd for my username, but I was way too tired for that lately lol. Thanks for the comment by the way. :-)
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Superb
A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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Great name, which says a lot more than richykins though that was cute. The new names says a lot about yourself and you have thought it out more
"I never see the treasure gleaming
'Cause I'm always far too busy dreaming."
An idealist in other words. I am a bit like that myself.
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Yeah, but I find the problem is that you tend to miss real opportunities while you're dreaming out how to get them in the first place lol.. I liked my name cause of the song at first, but now it's more because there's a certain sense of balance to my name, at least for me, it could as easily be goodevilchoice, but that wouldn't sound nearly as good would it? lol
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