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Cutting Illumination

I'm a lullaby
churning the sorrows of 1a.m.
in a forest of blame,
  and the leaves whisk away

Like flashbacks to the dance
my foot slips to space
 eyes train to fly,
  up
        up
and nowhere;

a home of the heart
never cuddling in hands,
friction dead on a sidewalk
the cracks,

    never traced

as smiles stamp,
             here.

I lack sensations
from matching the adorned
  skipping daises,
and smelling the soon after sins;

for simplicity finds the stars
that never fall,
 glue ocean's air
through pulverized shards
                    of my name.

as thoughts kiss goodnight
 I'll hold the world,
       to believe this knowledge
is just a different way of saying

     hello,

      I’m just not meant to be.

 

 

 

 

 

                                      

Author notes

1.
I like too many things and get all confused and hung-up running from one falling star to another till i drop. This is the night, what it does to you. I had nothing to offer anybody except my own confusion.”
- Jack Kerouac


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  • Never Fall in Love
    November 11, 2008

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    I will echo valor - the ending is amazing. I alothought that the way you started it was pretty exceptional and sets the tone for sorrow for the rest of the poem.

    You really are putting emotions into your words in a way I never thought could happen.


  • crimsondew
    November 3, 2008
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    *sigh* Just beautiful dear...
    and Good luck!


  • autarky
    November 2, 2008
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    i love the ending!!!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    This is so beautiful, it’s hard to find words for beauty conveyed
    by such a unique and delicate heart. You are something to be cherished,
    that’s all I know my dear Stephanie.


    All the best,
    with much love,
    mj.


  • spideracer
    November 2, 2008
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    Applause for effect

    Very well written, not sure but if it makes any sense. Still there are some great thought pattens going on here. I guess if one is embodied in their own confusion writing this, than is it safe to say that the reader too should wallow there as such? Oh I know I'm raving on to get my points up, so ta ta for now.


    • luna-midnight gold member
      November 2, 2008
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      okay..what are you talking about....who said anything about confusion on my part, for i understand it perfectly.
      and it would make sense, if you give it thought.

      thanks anyway.

  • crimsondew
    October 28, 2008
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    ok ...did not read...
    All the best dear!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 27, 2008
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    Let me know when it's done

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