When i was young and in my prime_i had no money not a single dime_i met this man,he was filthy rich_he married me,abused me and called me a bitch.Years went by,i dare not complain,had to endure all the heartache and pain.many beatings i suffered,insults galore,then i decîded i will suffer no more.I lay in wait one stormy night,i will defend myself its my right.He stood over me_belt in his hand, pulling my hair out strand by strand. Under my pillow i had a knife,this man must die,i shall take his life.Twice i stabbed him,in the neck in a state of shock_he began to beg.He died,i got caught and now im in jail,im in for life without any bail.They call me heartless,evil and cruel_no one understands what i went through.Life really dealt me one hell of a blow_much more than you will ever know_my message to you who is where ive been,its not your fault_it was unforseen.Seek help now before its too late_or you will suffer the very same fate,i remember the day,the day we were wed_and now this man,by my hand he is dead
Author notes
A life i had with my ex_6yrs of hell.how i went to bed planning the perfect murder_falling asleep after i was kicked in my pregnant belly wanting this man dead. I had a dream of what could of been had i lowered myself in his category.like my life flashing before my eyes in a dream. instead i yanked myself out of the shadows,believe i am amazing and there is life after my ex husband,i couldnt let this man mould me like putty anymore. And i refuse to live a life behind bars and loose my sons because of his abuse.
A contest entry
- Write Me To Tears by SilentMoonlight.
2700 points, ended November 3, 2008, 66 entries
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This is just amazing! i don't think i could ever live with someone abusive...at least i like to believe that. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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wow this was such a sad but powerful piece. I loved the story that you told, a warning to all in this situation. beautifully written thank you for entering
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Sad story. I enjoyed the rhyme but am of the opinion that rhyme works best when there is marked line divisions. It strengthens the rhyme (in my opinion) Thank you for entering.
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Thank you-i agree hundred percent-i use my mobile so i dont have many options on layout and format,i do try my best though
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This was so powerful and it gets the point across. No one should ever have to suffer such abuse. You tell a story I think no one could dismiss. I like the way you present it too, in a different format than I am used to. I hope your life has improved much since leaving that beast.
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I'm glad you wrote this and shared it.
The message you write is one everybody needs to hear:
You don't have to stay. You don't have to take the abuse. Get away as quickly as you can, and don't ever look back.
You wrote, "i am amazing and there is life after my ex husband"
Yes you are, and yes there is.
I hope your life just keeps getting better and better.
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Thankyou my darling!!! yes! my life is magically blossoming!
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Good message. Keep writing and telling the whole world what it is to be abused! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Very sad and moving, so true for so many women that suffer abuse each day.
Well Done...Best Wishes
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this a really good poem, and as i put in my notes for my entry to the competion, sometimes freedom comes with a price. its an excelent write, i think i may have taped into my subconcious to write my poem as i too am a survivior or domestic violence. never again would i ever go through that, many years have passed since then, much love michelle
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Thanx honey. mwah
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Wow! Great to read a poem from you
This is excellent. If it's not a true story, then you had me believing it!
Excellent message at the end too.
Your rhyme is also spot on!
I thinik if you set this out in stanzas rather than an underscore between lines, it would flow better and be much easier to read.
All the best with this
Gaylene
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thanx so much! it was suppose 2 b stanzas but typing from my mobile very tricky. the poem is about my life with my ex husband but the last part was based on a dream which in reality me having to walkout and save the lives of my son and unborn baby
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very original, powerfully written
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Thankyou very much
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