if i were a thumb,
first i would learn to feel
as precisely as a wristwatch
wound and trigger-
cocked.
you would, just
as thoroughly fuck it
straight to the bone,
- white, naked, and clean
until nothing is opposably left
to love you less
than i have.
maybe i'll see you around sometime. we would be simply as thick as peanut butter.
if you ask, i'll even tell you how she died:
alone,
a poet,
and singing.
Author notes
yeah, that's how it goes and goes
A contest entry
- new slang by hilly.
700 points, ended November 8, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
rip it.
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I enjoyed this work and how you ended it. The ending says it all.
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Wow this is really good. I love how you ended it.
Great job
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Good!!! lol You are brilliant from what I have read
I am extremely glad I came across your work it is brilliant
Keep writing, never stop; it would be a crying shame
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you are good. do you know that?
helen~
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thank you
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de nada!
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i really love this.
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It's amazingggggg. I love the ending. Best of luck in the contest!
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loveit
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the last eight lines were really incredible.
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"until nothing is opposably left"
ah, a bit of doublespeak there, yes? I love the whole thing, but mostly the ending. <3
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doublespeak?
sorry. this band geek hasn't heard of it.
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Well, I was trying to think of a different word. I really just meant that you had two meanings. Not quite irony... so I think I made up a word XP
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haha. leave it to the English buff to make up figures of speech. :]
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i hate that i wish i could write like you do.
but i love this.
and you!
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hush, you.
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fantastic.
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i like.
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hehe thanks. :]
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