when i look at you
i see your pain inside
of the thought of your family
knowing you died
you walked in there life
to maybe walk away
but that's a price you'll have to pay
your leaving you family
is that ok?
watch when your daughter is turning 4
you'll be there to say i love you
or you'll be in the middle of a war
you have to leave now
and your daughters saying no
she says please don't go
and daddy wants you to know
he'll be ok
and daddy promises he'll be back one day.
A contest entry
- What Do You See? (Military version) by Shadowsong.
1700 points, ended October 28, 2008, 10 entries
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Comments
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great sentiment, but please check spelling!
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this is really sad, but well done, in your last line it should read "he'll" not "hell"
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