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We burned

We burned,
The Unknown Soldier's burning flame.
Mysterious in Life,
Eternal in Death.

We burned,
Amidst mercury teardrops,
Amidst stormy passions.
Lighting flash in a dark night,
One of a kind,
Like the north star in the morning sky.

On and on, we burned.
But you fell away,
Like so much cigarette ash.

We burned and you fell away,
Whether in sickness or in good health,
You fell away.
What more can I say ?

I've just started writing recently, so the most critical reviews will be the most delicious to read. (END WAR, END OPPRESSION)

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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