Grief and sorrow
Oh how I feel their sting,
Longing for our tomorrows.
Didn't we plan to grow old together,
Everything planted with finest seed,
Never a thought for widows weed's.
Darling, with all my
Abiding love I bring you
Favourite flowers
From our garden,
Overtures of spring.
Didn't you plant them there?
Insisting you would still be here
Long into our winter
So cruel of death to interfere.
Author notes
An acrostic.
An old one re-posted
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful work.
I loved the acceptance and the continuation of these reminders, for does winter not carry inside it the reminders of spring and new life?
Love
Myra
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Thank you Myra, Nice to hear from you.
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Oh, this is beautiful. I really enjoyed reading this, the emotions are so strong, and conveyed in such an original and heartbreaking way. All I can say is wow. I love it.
~lost
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Bandit Auction # 10
What a lovely and distinctively creative Acrostic with a somber message. You pluck the heart strings with this write. Well Done!
Brother Dennis
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Bandits Auction #10
this is a gorgeous poem and speeks of spring so kindly. I love it. a really effective choice of emotive words. Well done and best of luck.
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Great acrostic here, I read the words before realising it was actually an acrostic. Effective word choice with imagery that spoke to me
Shari
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Such best laid plans fall apart. I relate to this poem in a small way. Thank you for sharing your poem. -
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The Poetic Bandits
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So beautiful and very loving. Loosing love ones brings out the sadness in our hearts. I know first hand too.
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Thank you Sandra,
sadly it is one of the certainties in life we must come to terms with,
R
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This is a beautifully done acrostic I really like the way that it flows so well - nicely done ... a sad story, written well and enjoyed
Keep writing
Polly
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Thank you Ron, beautiful I like.
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Fluently beautiful acrostic. Ron.
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Thank you my friend..now I am amazed too.
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Very goo metaphor for the loss on a loved one even after all of the planning. It stands with sorrow and confusion with a bit of anger in these words. Good flow and wording and the fact that you say so much with so little.
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
R
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Distinction!
This is probably the best acrostic I've ever seen! Honestly. The flow is perfect and the story so eloquently expressed with intimacy and a soft gentleness. Love how you weave the daffodils throughout your words giving them such depth of personal meaning to the couple. You never cease to amaze me. Just fantastic!...alby
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Very touching. Overwhelming air of sadness and loss.
You did a very fine job with this and I really like it.
Rhythm and flow are perfect and it is a most readable poem.
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Thank you wolfheart.
R
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