A voice that echoes through your head
Not sure what's right
What's wrong is dead
The thought's that scratch and kick and scream
A child's cry
A mother's plight
The strong but lonely howl of night
Mourning tempest
Shining bright
The hidden break in moral's chains
To die for loss
And not for gain
A contradiction of the soul
Two closed fists
An open heart
Broken by hate I fight for love
And ask for you
An Angel too
Author notes
I am the Almight Enigma. Fear Me (lmfao, Rain, u have some ego problems XD)
Not quite happy with one of the parts to it, but meh
A contest entry
- Who are you... Really? by Second Dance Reborn.
1050 points, ended November 10, 2008, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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it was intresting. its way better than anything that i write. great job.
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I have ego problems? Am I right or am I right?
Anyway, an interesting write. I personally am confused on what this poem is trying to say (but I've also been reading poems since about 12 this afternoon.), but I'm sure I could figure it out with a little though and a bit of rest. All the same, though, I feel some unknown truth singing inside me and it makes me feel alive. Great job, Angel.
Best of Luck,
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lol, you're right, as usual :-p
thanks, the tiredness probably is hindering you considering that I tried to make some references to stuff i've told you in past conversations, lol, but you're forgiven XD
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*sighs* Clappy guys.... I keep forgetting....
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I quite like this but it does seem a bit...off that it rhyme's then doesn't...But it still had a good flow... I quite like the last stanza... Good luck in the comp ^^
~lae
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I like the first verse and the third the best. Theyre pretty good. I dont like the second verse at all. Most of this poem rhymes and it annoyed me how that bit didnt. But the last bit was also good. good luck
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Thanks for the comment, I personally found the fifth verse the least satisfying, although it probably shows me more than any of the other verses I just didn't think the flow felt right
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