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All that Matters.

i want to be everywhere
i want to feel everyone
i want to see everything
i want to live under your sun

i want to fuck this world apart
make it bleed from every seam
i want to rape your dying god
take his place and all you see

i want to matter
fallen pieces of your world
and let them shatter
drift through out your end
tiny feet that scatter
in your desolate universe

i want to be everyone
I want to know everything
how to make you cry at night
how to make your children scream

I want to fuck what can't be fucked
i want to touch what i can't touch
I don't think that i'm asking much
I just want all that i can't have.

I want to matter
fallen pieces of your world
and let them shatter
drift throughout your end
tiny feet that scatter
in your desolate universe

I want to fuck what can't be fucked
forbidden fruit my mouth can't touch
I want to touch what i can't touch
I just want all that I can't have.

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  • xXemo-teddybearXx
    January 4

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    hey im glad u entered my contest
    this was a really good poem
    i liked how u out so much emotion into it
    great write
    xXalyXx


  • -unsavedangel-
    November 9, 2008

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    I really like this. I like that it's short and to the point, but at the same time it isn't plain or void of meaning.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    October 28, 2008
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    a nice piece


  • Ligeia
    October 27, 2008
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    Please capitalize your i's it makes you look unprofessional when you do not.
    This poem was sick.


    • Apocalyptic Scarves
      October 27, 2008
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      did you ever consider that they are uncapitalized for a reason?


      • FluorescentFixation
        January 3
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        What reason would that be (not capitalizing the i's)? Just out of curiousity.

        This is really interesting, the repetition sounds like song lyrics. Actually, it immensely reminds me of the lyrics from some Nine Inch Nails songs. Have you heard of that band? It's really good.

        Anyways, yeah, the anger, want, and frustration in this is brilliantly expressed through your word choice. Although it certainly wasn't the best I've read of this style, it is still pretty good.

  • ljmitch
    October 27, 2008

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    awesome

    a great write on how we all feel at one time or another. always feels good to let it out.
    i love how it reads, really easy and to the point.
    nice!
    ljmitch

  • Apocalyptic Scarves
    October 27, 2008
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    thanks, i hope i get my shit together to really record


  • movedon
    October 27, 2008

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    comment numero dos para tu! porque te amo

    i love it...strong words and kinda eeire and spooky. i love the last stanza. its sha awesome

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