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Discolored Roses

i guess that all of this torment
is starting to get to me
i want to know something
if you all did care so much about me
why am i still being treated

i want to guess why i've been fairly reduced
nothing is giving up
i won't give truce
roses of discolored contempt
have my heart
won't you just start to look into my eyes
pain before pleasure
i've started to rise

your too much
i can't believe that you would say all those things
you don't mean a damn word
you don't even bother with me
i might call you a friend
but i want more than that
and if i can't have it
then i won't call you back

Chorus
discolored roses
have grown fond of me
discolored contempt
has started to bleed
for your insolence
i shall release....

i tried my best to be by your side
and you played my emotions
so you won't decide
my fate is my fate
and yours is mine to behold
if you won't let me in
i will lose control
so you laugh at my heartbrokeness
i shall release your body from me

and i can't look into her eyes
every teardrop that i cry
blood is nothing
and hate is my source
so what if i don't need you around
i won't let myself
be runned through the ground
no more of your selfish lies
i don't care if you have problems
as do i....

Chorus 2X
discolored roses
have grown fond of me
discolored contempt
has started to bleed
for your insolence
i shall release...

discolored roses
have grown fond of me
discolored contempt
has started to bleed
for your insolence
i shall release...

so what if you say things
they mean nothing to me
so what if you mean things
you try to hurt me
through selfish loathing
i shall start to bleed
no more pain for me
i relinquish your soul
body and mind
have no means to control

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  • Amarillistarshot silver member
    October 27, 2008

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    Another very powerful piece. (a pattern...? hmmm...) This one truly spoke to me, because I can relate to it in some ways. When you love someone, and all they do is hurt you, and all you do is hurt them, it really sucks. You turned that into wonderful lyrics that could easily become a great song. The emotion in this piece is extremely realistic. We don't really have very much control over our actions if you stop to think about it. The only thing that really bugged me was 'runned through the ground.' Maybe a rephrasing? Try 'pounded into the ground' or something like that. But 'runned' isn't a word... Great write, hubby!


  • DeathlyAngel
    October 27, 2008
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    WOW, this is really good hun, i like it. Just remember i'm here if u ever need to talk


  • x-Valiant-x
    October 26, 2008
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    'i might call you a friend
    but i want more than that
    and if i can't have it
    then i won't call you back'
    I love this part the most, but i really like the whole thing together.... do you have a band to play them? ? you really have a talent for expressing strong emotions....